Poetry Alone:

from a short conversation with Soren - many thanks, sir.

To make sense of mine-

untwisting turns of word

blending the road ahead

makes space in the mind.

Prose built on plain facts-

even in fiction and fantasy

imagined not real or true

narrative is the final act.

Music firmly enfolds prose-  

within its nature firmly held

laced in rhythm and rhyme 

for a unified melody meld.

Poetry alone encircles all-

to interweave the mystery

of mathematically planed

stressed syllable harmony.  

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

If I must plan a thing by mathematical parameters I don't think that's "poetry". It may be a "form" or a "recipe" used to create verse to specified criteria but only feeling creates poetry. And only poetry evokes that feeling from the reader. And it MUST be so or else we could not have prose poetry or many of the other types of poems that exist. I like the scene in Dead Poet's Society where Robin Williams has his poetry class rip the pages from their books on what "poetry" is for the same reason.

[carl]

much appreciate the read and review - I share your view on poetry and feelings - my thought on poetry is it encompasses both prose narrative and music melody and has a structure that could be expressed mathematically - not that math is used to form it but that when it is done well ( is there not that which claims to be and isn't ) it would contain a nature expressible as a mathematical sequence - I am thinking ( I hope ) by limited understanding of an innate quality found in nature such as the mathematical patterns ( not as a construct of human doing) rather a universal principle of nature. I admit I am being heavily influenced by information recently digested which states we are both creations and creators and the only things that do art, make music, and dance. I think of mathematics as a pattern or sequence like the Fibonacci sequence or the golden ratio. I believe in divine order but also realize a monkey wrench has been thrown into the mix as well - the song says “this is my Father’s world” but the Master said “ My kingdom is not of this world” Now having said all this please realize I am a novice in most everything and often my reasoning is ensnared by briars and brambles. - please don’t feel it necessary to respond I just wanted to try and clarify my thoughts - much appreciate your interaction - be well - carl

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I suppose there is math in everything which is a comfort considering the axioms never change. It's nice to know some things are dependable like 2+2 always being four. It's rather more difficult to find people we can rely on. Thanks for being a friend. It's always a pleasure.

[Vol]

EmmaJoy,
When I think that EVERYTHING I know, EVERYTHING that is me, whether right now at this computer, or sixty years ago in 7th grade, or what I see coming down the road, is carried within these roundish bones of what I perceive to be my head, everything I call reality comes into question and the answer is down a rabbit hole so deep, I refuse to follow it. It is easier to just accept things as they seem... That I am not the only being with a universe sized imagination, that I am loved and do love, that I am enthralled by things poetic, and most of all create poetry of my own. The solar system is so insignificant, the earth even less so, and here I am a "Consciousness" trying to make sense of a space where in the trillions of galaxies, the Milky Way is also a tiny speck. Science is beginning to say that the universe itself might be conscious, or, better named GOD.And the conscuiousness he gives us is in His own image, so WE HAVE TO WRITE POETRY! It is who we are in the
mystery

of mathematically planed

stressed syllable harmony.

Vol

[John the Baptist]

Interesting comparison of the arts of prose, music and poetry here. The problem for me is that much that is currently called poetry sounds like what I used to call prose. Worse, it is vague prose. I can't look at the offerings in The New Yorker without asking 1) What are you trying to tell me? Or 2) Why are you telling me this?

[emmajoygreen]

You have created an organic way of displaying and telling facts without lecture or overly inflated language! Each four lines has a reason for being, start to finish!

'Music firmly enfolds prose-
within its nature firmly held
laced in rhythm and rhyme
for a unified melody meld.

Poetry alone encircles all-
to interweave the mystery
of mathematically planed
stressed syllable harmony. '

[carl]

thanks for the read and review - what you have described is what I was trying to accomplish and I'm glad it had some success - Looking at it now I may write it out as each stanza a line just to see if still works - I wanted to deal with descriptive words and eliminate as many extraneous words like articles and prepositions as possible. appreciate your encouragement - carl

[emmajoygreen]

WISH I could help myself more, carl!

[Lorry]

I've read more than a few self explanations for what poetry is to the individual that creates it, but I think you got the recipe spot on with this one Carl.
I'm always over-yolking mine or they come out too dry or crumbly, but this would even get a gold star and a "go to the top of the class" from Gordon Ramsay himself! Or maybe that would be a gold mixing spoon! 😃

[carl]

thanks for your time to read consider and review - just trying to understand my point of view on what I am doing - appreciate your words - made me smile - carl

[Lorry]

You're very welcome.