Mundane Persona:

sometimes I feel like a motherless child - Henry Thacker Burleigh

Mundane Persona: 

Distraught mundane persona

awaiting passage to oblivion

pays homage with aspiring love

sympathetically directed above

to those on cloud filled wings

soaring as natural epiphanies

sweetly blending ethereal arcs

into surreal light and out of dark.

Reviews

[DIVYA]

A mundane persona that I would relate to every human on earth, often distraught and finally dying to meld with oblivion. I loved the mortal nature that your words brought to me. The briefness of a life, mostly spent despairing and aspiring to love. The ultimate reward appears to lie above the cloud filled wings, in a place of surreal light. A place that is hoped to end all the darkness.

A Mundane Persona helps contemplate on the purpose of life. Can anything be done to change the mundane to remarkable...? These were the thoughts that occurred to me as I read the poem and I loved it.

[carl]

thanks for the time and review - your first paragraph is exactly what I was hoping for - much appreciated -carl

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"I should have been a pair of ragged claws scuttling cross the floors of silent seas" TS Eliot

Yes, I can feel the despair in this one. I've known complete despair but it did not claim me. Now, I've known greater love, hope, faith and joy since than ever before. Be blessed, my friend. F.

[carl]

thanks for the visit and review - I relate to your journey out of despair into love and hope - trust things therefore are good with you also - carl

[Pete]

wreaks of loneliness. grasping for whatever gives life meaning. love, any love certainly fits the bill, not so easy to obtain but can always give/share it. but then what do i know, i'm the blind trying to lead the blind.

[carl]

thanks for the read and review - watch out for that ditch -carl

[mou]

The eight lines are seeking an undivided attention and multiple reads. I feel a 'pause' takes place which is reflecting the brightness of 'every next thing'. It creates a shadow on self that is unconsciously weaving some bygones and more. It is truly a consuming write, Carl
- mou

[carl]

more than I could have hoped for - thanks for the read and expository review - much appreciated. -carl

[mou]

It is always my pleasure to read your work

[Rachel Fitzgerald-Feele..]

Have read this a couple of times. End of life comes to mind - wanting to join those that are reaching out for us, those that are in a seemingly better place. Have enjoyed reading this even though I may have interpreted it different than intended. Do tell...

[carl]

don't think I could explain it any better, as it is somewhat vague to me as well, emotional it connects but may be lacking specific clarity - It did come from a place of longing for the Above and Other and a sense of disappointment for the present reality. thanks for the read and review -carl

[Rachel Fitzgerald-Feeley]

Thanks for explaining alittle more. I hope all is well. Any more thoughts on attempting a haiku? I've tried a couple more...