Scattered Pearls:

"Quit yer moaning," she said to me.

 

Tracks in the sand trace a line of remorse

for a life derailed from intended course-

but desperate sighs show a lack of regard

for emotions cold and conscience charred.

 

Seeking exclusion with sweet sublime

and quickly mentioning a wounded mind-

you beg exception with spurious plea

laying claim to a heart of despondency.

 

Don't sing me anthems of desolate scorn

nor lip sync curses for the day you're born-

faint breath on the mirror is clear evidence

of spirit's strong will and flesh not spent.

 

The pearls you scattered across sands of time

lay trampled in the dust at the feet of swine-

but the cards you were dealt must yet be played

and all your grief won't make a heart a spade.

Author's Note

- with apologies for the cliché at the end.

Reviews

[FGFRANKLIN]

I enjoyed the cliché's and proverb references in the final verse. I do believe the last word in the first verse should perhaps be "charred"? Unless you were referring to the common beet or beta vulgaris subspecies that serves up the leafy green vegetable that I refuse to eat. (smile) I was likewise wondering if the title might not also have been intended as "Scattered Pearls" instead of "Peals" since the former is mentioned within the verse. And was it intended as "tracks" in the sand instead of "tacks"? I've stepped on tacks before though and it's certainly an unpleasant experience. Forgive all my bold questions and suggestions. It is not my intention to wax critical. I'm simply the inquisitive editor and proofreader I was trained to be. I enjoyed the read, regardless.

[carl]

blessings to you - I am a terrible speller - just one of my weaknesses. I will edit. thank you for the read and help. much appreciated.

[carl]

also not a good typist. lol

[Chris Shaw]

Lines in the fourth stanza really beautiful. Those scattered pearls tell a story. Scattered pearls can cause hurt to another. Forgiveness has to be earned and may be given. Some stuff can’t be forgotten though. Enjoyed the read. Nicely penned poem.

Chris

[carl]

Thanks for the read and review, much appreciated.

[AYVID N]

"faint breath on the mirror is clear evidence
of spirit's strong will and flesh not spent."

~ Amazingly beautiful lines to read...As long as there's life, there's a chance to overturn the scorn and the lack of regard. We must face what we have to and take it as it comes without feeling too sorry about it.

[carl]

appreciate the read, insight, and kind words. thanks you -carl

[Coyote Poetry]

Again great shared Carl.
"The pearls you scattered across sands of time
lay trampled in the dust at the feet of swine-
but the cards you were dealt must yet be played
and all your grief won't make a heart a spade."
All of us learn the above lines. We learn we can't seek forgiveness or we cannot forgive another. Death steal the option away. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I love poetry that make me think.
Coyote

[carl]

very kind of you, thanks for the read and the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Carl.

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of one confronting the remorse and guilt of another. What transpired is not specified, but the other at some previous time must have acted with ruthless disregard and now is repenting and asking mercy. One wonders if the mea culpa is genuine, and whether the penitent might backslide. Of course, we are counseled to forgive, and such is good. On the other hand, it's also wise to keep your powder dry.

[carl]

thanks for the read and the review, your comments are valued and appreciated.