Smile

another skinny poem

the noise of

quiet

burning

light 

walks

on 

warm

skin

lips

divided

unveil

naked

shine

 

time

s t r e t c h e s

tissue

quakes

neon

masks

emit

 invisible light

through

thinning windows

 

travelling symbols

compose

repeated prayers

filling channels

breathing

soft

words

 

the

space

between

two points

s

u

s

p

e

n

d

s

vivid

happy

death

------

what

makes

you

smile

?

Reviews

[roarke]

suspending vivid death........... isn't that like bungie jumping? The thing I like about poetry framed like this is the reader can group his own words together to construct the association or pace of the piece. You've given the reader many choices and all yield an interesting frame to consider. Good job.

[Linear]

A vivid happy death? is there such a thing?
love the skinny format, and this poem made me smile

[Aven]

this is a brilliant write, a bit unpolished by the looks of it, but when you read it you recognize it's beauty... every word seemed as if reflected upon... and I especially liked the ending "what makes you smile?" so simple, so genius. :)

[Misty Blue Eyes]

this is such a great poem. makes you think thats for sure

[Dark Empress]

I like this, it really makes you think. Very good, poem. I like it alot. Love the way its constructed to :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

i like this, i like how the title doesn't nessecarily give away the whole poem, it had a deeper meaning then one would expect. good work!

If I were as skinny as this poem, I'd be smiling. Especially since it looks like it still has junk in the trunk. I like big butts. They make me smile. ;P

[My Fair Lady]

I like skinny poems.

[Nobody.]

moves really well. you work the words in a trickle sort of way that just keeps the eyes moving. Not to mention that the content is damn good. Stranges images in short pecking burts that burrough into the mind and nest there.
brilliant work man.
cheers!

[.]

. this poem makes me smile ... not just because of the way it's been written but also because of the way in which it's been presented ...

[Alicia Schroeder]

Nice, i like this one alot.