Smile

Smile

A Poem by Toon
"

another skinny poem

"

the noise of

quiet

burning

light 

walks

on 

warm

skin

lips

divided

unveil

naked

shine

 

time

s t r e t c h e s

tissue

quakes

neon

masks

emit

 invisible light

through

thinning windows

 

travelling symbols

compose

repeated prayers

filling channels

breathing

soft

words

 

the

space

between

two points

s

u

s

p

e

n

d

s

vivid

happy

death

------

what

makes

you

smile

?

© 2010 Toon


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suspending vivid death........... isn't that like bungie jumping? The thing I like about poetry framed like this is the reader can group his own words together to construct the association or pace of the piece. You've given the reader many choices and all yield an interesting frame to consider. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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A vivid happy death? is there such a thing?
love the skinny format, and this poem made me smile

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is a brilliant write, a bit unpolished by the looks of it, but when you read it you recognize it's beauty... every word seemed as if reflected upon... and I especially liked the ending "what makes you smile?" so simple, so genius. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is such a great poem. makes you think thats for sure

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this, it really makes you think. Very good, poem. I like it alot. Love the way its constructed to :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


i like this, i like how the title doesn't nessecarily give away the whole poem, it had a deeper meaning then one would expect. good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


If I were as skinny as this poem, I'd be smiling. Especially since it looks like it still has junk in the trunk. I like big butts. They make me smile. ;P

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like skinny poems.

Posted 14 Years Ago


moves really well. you work the words in a trickle sort of way that just keeps the eyes moving. Not to mention that the content is damn good. Stranges images in short pecking burts that burrough into the mind and nest there.
brilliant work man.
cheers!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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. this poem makes me smile ... not just because of the way it's been written but also because of the way in which it's been presented ...

Posted 14 Years Ago


Nice, i like this one alot.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Toon

Philadelphia, PA



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