Egg

Egg

A Poem by Toon
"

this is an attempt at poetry

"

a salty desert

cracks

the shell of an egg   

leaking yolk

under 

the sun’s atomic 

whisper

 

time in between

lightning

and the tumbling of

thunder

screaming

dark and light 

blinding

 not 

distinguished

not

defining 

 

the eternal

finite

waves breaking

 wash away

my

emptiness

 

i think

i loved you

was i right

or

was i

right

?

© 2010 Toon


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Enjoyed the poem, great format always helps the reader.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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. you're right ... fantastic stuff ... very creative and inspirational ...


Posted 14 Years Ago


I'll take it....attempted with great success. I loved this. Taking everyday reality and making it suitably impressive...its what poetry is all about. Great work, I loved it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


pretty unusual- but some of the best poetry is

Posted 14 Years Ago


great piece of writing. the images portrayed challenged my grip on reality, and, yet, felt extremely familiar to me. I felt it.
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Posted 14 Years Ago


It's very different, I'll give you that. I like it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Different, but I enjoyed it. Well written

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like the way you have taken an ordinary egg and extrapolated it into abstract art. Wonderful conclusion.

Posted 14 Years Ago


you must have been looking at an egg lol its a wonderful poem

Posted 14 Years Ago


A very successful attempt if you ask me... and since you did, I'll be one to tell you. This is vivid, this is poetry.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Toon
Toon

Philadelphia, PA



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