Egg
A Poem by
Toon
this is an attempt at poetry
a salty desert
cracks
the shell of an egg
leaking yolk
under
the sun’s atomic
whisper
time in between
lightning
and the tumbling of
thunder
screaming
dark and light
blinding
not
distinguished
not
defining
the eternal
finite
waves breaking
wash away
my
emptiness
i think
i loved you
was i right
or
was i
right
?
© 2010 Toon
Reviews
Enjoyed the poem, great format always helps the reader.
Posted 14 Years Ago
. you're right ... fantastic stuff ... very creative and inspirational ...
Posted 14 Years Ago
. you're right ... fantastic stuff ... very creative and inspirational ...
I'll take it....attempted with great success. I loved this. Taking everyday reality and making it suitably impressive...its what poetry is all about. Great work, I loved it.
Posted 14 Years Ago
I'll take it....attempted with great success. I loved this. Taking everyday reality and making it suitably impressive...its what poetry is all about. Great work, I loved it.
pretty unusual- but some of the best poetry is
Posted 14 Years Ago
pretty unusual- but some of the best poetry is
great piece of writing. the images portrayed challenged my grip on reality, and, yet, felt extremely familiar to me. I felt it.
cheers1
Posted 14 Years Ago
great piece of writing. the images portrayed challenged my grip on reality, and, yet, felt extremely familiar to me. I felt it.
cheers1
It's very different, I'll give you that. I like it.
Posted 14 Years Ago
It's very different, I'll give you that. I like it.
Different, but I enjoyed it. Well written
Posted 14 Years Ago
Different, but I enjoyed it. Well written
I like the way you have taken an ordinary egg and extrapolated it into abstract art. Wonderful conclusion.
Posted 14 Years Ago
I like the way you have taken an ordinary egg and extrapolated it into abstract art. Wonderful conclusion.
you must have been looking at an egg lol its a wonderful poem
Posted 14 Years Ago
you must have been looking at an egg lol its a wonderful poem
A very successful attempt if you ask me... and since you did, I'll be one to tell you. This is vivid, this is poetry.
Posted 14 Years Ago
A very successful attempt if you ask me... and since you did, I'll be one to tell you. This is vivid, this is poetry.
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Added on October 22, 2010
Last Updated on October 23, 2010
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Toon Philadelphia, PA
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