Lady Apathy

The memory-drop: a cleaver;
The lover - nonbeliever;
When storm and dust subside
Then maybe he'll believe her.

A siren, she's a fever;
A nonchalant retriever
Of fame and sullen fortune -
An apathetic weaver.

No, she's no deceiver,
She's just a detached viewer;
And though she sends them packing,
She's a magnanimous receiver.

Though some day it may grieve her
That love might chance to leave her,
For now the past and present
Entangle to relieve her.

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

i adore the flow of this..

a real delight to read

well done

:)

[Austin H.]

Hmm, I think I'm understanding this. I'm going with apathy is a positive aspect, yet people are seeing it was negative. At least, that's how it happens to me. However, I think she only puts up a front of total apathy, while she still longs for something warm, such as love. This feels to be a strong write, however I'm not sure what exactly I need to take away from it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Putting up walls is a sure way to keep out the pain, but it also keeps out the joy... it is a defense mechanism have use sometimes in my life... I try not to know.
Anyways I liked the rhyming scheme, flow and mostly the wording.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

a dissenting view here. i really disliked the continuing use of the same rhyme over and over and over. i found it distracting and boring. as if it was the point of the poem and not the subject matter. can't please everyone, i guess.

[Priya]

Thank you very much for your comment :) This was an experiment to deduce whether continuous rhyme becomes trite. I guess opinions differ on that.

[AK]

Wow! This piece flows wonderfully! I love the rhyming throughout. Lots of -er's throughout the poem:))

[Nautili]

Apathy can truly be a defense so we do not get too over invested and therefore possibly face disappointment.....I wonder if this could be at the heart of this lovely siren.

[Alexandria Reece]

This couldn't be any more brilliant, it flows so perfectly that I am jealous of it. Had to read it aloud twice to get the full appreciation, it was gorgeous Priya.. spectacular!

-favourited-

[Priya]

Thank you so much for your kind review ^_^