Silver Rain

The water's falling on my roof,

drip drop, drip drop,

and the seconds wither away

in the soft confines of your gaze

as you hold me close,

safe from the freezing touch

of the silver rain

You are millions of miles in me,

drenched in the sweat of dreams

and the lavishness of thoughts,

inscribed in the pitter patter

of my heart

The clouds can't clear,

and I remember their silver waters

pouring

as you enter me slowly

Reviews

[Rahul]

"You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams... "

Such adorable lines! Liked the way how amazingly you have penned the poetry... well decorated & carved with quiteness of words. Loved the imagery of rain & love with dreams & miles. Looking forward to reading your work!

[Nirego]

The writing is delicate, which reflects the sentiment and there's good use of language and metaphor. However, it reads a little awkward and could do with some work on the structure and rhythm.

Overall a nice write, though.

[Justin]

Beautiful. Also, admire you for what you are doing keep it up

[Enigma]

"You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams
and the lavishness of thoughts,
inscribed in the pitter patter
of my heart" - My favourite

Loved this. :)

[Coffee Vampier]

Great use of the word lavishness. I am a wordy person I love it when people go out of a normal zone. You did it quite well

[A. Amos]

You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dreams
and the lavishness of thoughts,
inscribed in the pitter patter
of my heart

Love, romance simply in its best form. Well done my friend

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very romantic, touching piece that relates well.

[Saddam]

You are millions of miles in me,
drenched in the sweat of dream
very well dear. it is very romantic poetry and i can feel the sweet rain. nice of you dear/