Please Don't Leave Me

Sad and hopeless? Maybe, but it's how I'm feeling at the moment :(

Please don't leave me clutching at straws

To find a jot of joy

In the nothingness of the day

And in the emptiness of the night

Devoid of hope or reason.

Please don't leave me alone to face

A world that doesn't like me

Like it used to;

That strives to create a vacuum

In the middle of my ventricles.

Please don't leave me in a place

Where no one cares

Whether I live or die,

Without your warm providence

Available to sustain me.

Please don't leave me be a nervous wreck

Withered and unsure of all that

Happens or has happened in life,

Unsure of the reality of being,

Unsure of myself.

I'm shorn of pretension and worn and wearied;

I'm haunted by doubts and medleys of thoughts.

I am weak but not a coward

And though I do not fear defeat,

I pray I do not become an empty shell,

I pray, please don't leave me alone!

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

LOvely piece of writing...
I totally got attached to your piece..
So emotional too :)
Keep writing!!

Your friend
Akshat

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The vulnerability is undeniable... as humans we all possess that quality... many hide it but I applaud you for expressing yours. And you did it in such a wonderfully creative manner.

[Alexandria Reece]

The desperation in the plea here is heartbreaking. It makes me want to take a bow and arrow and line it up behind whoever's back this is in case they don't turn around so I can shoot them through the bloody heart!! [{Heh, excuse my protective nature dear, dear Priya.. ahem, on with the review}].

You made me feel, and not just kicking me into guardian mode, you drew me back through time where I was in your shoes.. where so many before have been and in times to come will be. Your words are powerful and your form is immaculate, lovely Shikra! The end was so you that I could practically feel your beating heart in my hands, quivering there with fear, though courageous as a lion! My favourite lines were:
'That strives to create a vacuum
In the middle of my ventricles.'
Uh, that's just amazing! I'm always in awe of you :) and hey, as Elvish-speaking nerds like me would say: 'Cormlle naa tanya tel'raa', your heart is as the lion's! Carry on, Lady!

[Nautili]

Well, what if this person did indeed leave? What would happen then? You would be sad, terribly sad, and depressed no doubt. Loneliness and rejection would be lurking in the shadows.....but also you would learn that after the tears you are stonger than you thought, and you would start to smile again, and realize there are so many people and possibilities in this world.I know this would happen, so don't be too afraid of abandonment, for as the saying goes-when a door closes, the universe has a way of opening another, and behind it the vista is often more lovely than the previous one.