you can count on me.

brand new. still needs some work. david berman influenced.

You Can Count On Me

 

 

she had brown eyes but i'm sure they shined like diamonds.

the cat gets ta catch'n when she walks into the room.

a thins sheet of glass is all that keeps me from her.

I wanna reach down and fetch up a stone,

'cause i'm pretty sure that i'm in love with you.

and i'm pretty sure this feeling is mutual.

and you're surely pretty enough to shake my bones.

Reviews

[faryn wolff]

This is very lyrical and bluntly expressive. The last line is great.