Miserable Love

A Story by Violet Chan

The first snow of the winter that melted my heart. The snow caressed my skin for the last time.. I felt the pain. Heading straight, making my way to the dark woods where I lost her. A strong breeze forced me to step back as I made my first step into the woods... My heart was pounding faster, much faster, tears were about to fall... Couldn't bear living without my little sister. Keeping her in my heart all along. The days we spent together smiling, laughing, crying, eating, playing, sleeping, everything crossed across my mind, making it even harder for me to breathe. Even though you were so clumsy and insane, I still loved you the most, more than your beelzebub. She's nowhere.. And a life without her is like a day without sun. So it was better to be gone.

Walking deep into the woods, I felt scared, then I sensed that something was behind me, sound of thunder, fear buried me and I couldn't make a single movement. Turning around slowly, hoping everything was a nightmare. I caught my breath noticing a pack of wolves circling around me. Tempting to tear me apart... This is the end. I closed my eyes, I thought I would see her again... Felt the pain vanished. I saw her waving at me with her cute dimples on her cheeks...

-MUMPSIMUS

© 2017 Violet Chan

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Aeco

There are a few errors in flow for instance,
"My heart was pounding faster, very faster" you could change it to "much faster"
Also, you don't feel scary unless you think that you are intimidating, you feel scared.
And it lightning doesn't make a sound that is thunder, you could replace it to this, but if you want to keep your wording please spell it correctly to "sound of lightning."