Darkness

As darkness falls upon the door. I fall to my knees on the floor I cried out to God saying I can't take this anymore. As I stand up onto my feet. All my heart can do is weep. The darkness looks so deep. Then I feel some heat. I turned around in defeat. I feel a hot fiery blade flow through me. As I look and see all I see is classmates faces staring back at me. As I fall as I weep. I realize the only one who stabbed me is me. As I bleed all the classmates' faces are laughing at me. As a chill goes through me, I fall and bleed out happily  

Reviews

[Lero Ro]

I really liked the beginning but then it got very personal and I got confused and lost. It gets really unclear and the rhythm is completely off. (In my opinion) But it starts really great.

[Cole Misorski]

Yeah, it was more of a personal thing to really understand it and I agree with you that it has little to no rhythm to it. (I'm not being sarcastic) Thanks for the feedback and sorry it took me so long to respond