Hidden 2

Its about a girl who hides in the back cause shes scared to be herself, but when a guy hears about her and finds her in the back hidden he promises if she lets him in he will help her shine

If your looking for her you will have to go inside

Part the people left and right 

Because you wont find her in the front 

Where she should be with the ones shining bright and laughing loudly

And as you get in deep 

You start to see her face

Pale and in need of a warm embrace

But darling the world is a cold cold place

No you shouldn't have to do it on your own

Look at me and let me in and i promise you wont stay hidden

Author's Note

Thoughts?

Reviews

[The Iron Horseman]

This expresses the vulnerability of the young and it's accompanying angst very well. But the world is full of those with false promises; how can you know who to trust?
Well done.
I did feel that the lack of punctuation, the mixed font and the apparently random capitalization distracted from the message somewhat, though.

[Jennifer Cullum]

Your input is appreciated those are things i do need to start looking out for as i am new to sharing my writing with others. Thank you!

[The Iron Horseman]

Yiu are very welcome. I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Jennifer Cullum]

Thank you!