Onto the field

 

Onto the field

^By Barry S. Maltese

 

In the air of Competition

We are set to give our all

Doing our best to focus

We must now answer the call

NEVER harboring resentment

For the ones we face today

Cause we know that in this challenge

That we each feel the same way

 

Giving a Nod to our opponent

We might even shake their hand

We step out onto our battle field

And we boldly make our stand

Giving all we have with honor

They will see us at our best

For we plan to be triumphant

Heads above all of the rest

 

When our battle here is over

And we’ve finished for today

They shall know what we are made of

As we proudly march away

Though we fought our foes with dignity

We are here to stake our claim

We can achieve our goal of victory

Just as high as we might aim

©2008Barry S. Maltese

 

Reviews

[Onyx_Rayne]

'Giving all we have with honor
They will see us at our best
For we plan to be triumphant
Heads above all of the rest"

Love it! The piece is perfect. It's upbeat, inspirational, and it flows like silk. The reading, itself, was... well it was fun to read.

There are so many different situations this could apply to. Anyone who reads it could, possibly, think of any number of events when they've needed to shine and act with honor... dignity..sportsmanship... so many things!

Superb write - I enjoyed it, thoroughly :)

[Gandré]

I like how you always would weave words and output are lines full of harmony, insight and emotional impact, it's though you speak to my heart concerning his current state. Such a gem, this one. Many great lines. Its beauty moved me tears. Such a visionary example you are.. Favorite. 100 points.


Yes Barry, this one so fits with my idea of a new contest:
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Your-Opinion-and-Ideas-on-the-Topic-of-Poetry-Reviews/10691/
I want your strongest opinion on the topic of poetry reviews. Here few ideas:

Are poetry reviews helpful?
What is accomplished by poetry reviews?
Do they help to lift poet’s popularity, do they sell books or is poetry review just a subjective reflexion, just a beauty or the evocation of feeling?
Do poetry reviews keep the art form in line?
Do they spur writers into creating better poetry or kick bad writers out of the halls of Parnassus, the mythological home of music and poetry?
Do poetry reviews help readers or more likely poets?

[Barry S. Maltese]

I've never been in a marching band, but I have taken the field of competition so very many times. Be it football, Debate, or MY FAVORITE Baseball - where I took home MANY victorious trophies. This poem came from my discussions with you, and people in the band, and my own personal experience. Sorry that you feel I missed the mark, but I thought that I was there.

[Aileen]

vrry nice. n o so true. u have no idea wut it's like to be out on the field in the heat of the compition, n for it all to b over. im no incompleat. lol. nice job dad.
luv ya
AIleen