Beneath the shining Armor

Painful confessions

 

 

Beneath the shining Armor

By Barry S. Maltese

 

Some people often gaze at me

at what they've seen me do

Yes, I've helped out so very many

. . . maybe, even you!

Examining all my exploits

you'd contrive an enchanting list

But there is still a side of me

that is often forgotten and missed

 

For I have many weaknesses

my character has it's flaws

They all are buried by those reviews

of my many victorious wars

But, I guess my attempt at seeing them

is the first step that I must take

in fixing what is wrong with me

if only for my own sake

 

I might not be personally dangerous

to those both near or far

And I do not consume illicit drugs

like your favorite movie star

But there are parts within my life

that I am not proud are there

and I now vow to vanquish them

for the sake of the ones who care.

©2008Barry S. Maltese

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Onyx_Rayne]

Everyone should take this kind of time to examine themselves. We all have our faults and our weaknesses.. the thing that differentiates some from others is that recognition...that desire to better oneself inside. Sure the outside might be a pretty picture, but the inside is what makes a person truly beautiful... The struggle, the constant work on self, the act of caring enough about yourself...not for the sake of yourself , but for the sake of others and the effect you have on them... priceless and a definite rarity in this world.

Each stroke of your pen (or keyboard) paints you as a person with a good, true heart... despite any "chinks" in the armor.. you ARE the shining armor.

And this write shines a light on your talent - Loved it :)

[Tate Morgan]

his is very very good simple concise beautiful and direct It is a lucid tale of the workings of your mind and the window to your soul
bravo

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[KAREN]

A relateable poem that is written with heartfelt emotion! Excellent job!

[Sheila Kline]

Recognizing and acknowledging our weaknesses is perhaps the most important step in becoming a stronger person! You have expressed such thoughts in a way that is touching and memorable!
A nice capture of thoughts to help all of us understand we are not alone as we take a closer self examination into the part of us that is most weak!

[GTVile]

"that I am not proud ARE there" there's a plurality in the preceding line that you must couple with that line. Otherwise, its great. You take a bold step in admitting that beneath people's perception of the narrator, there are things that no one sees. That's the first step, and it's commendable that the narrator (presumably you) is willing to undergo the self-discovery and self-rectification necessary to improve. Bravo.

[Ladysue]

oh wow, I really liked this. So open with a warm flow...nobody is perfect and we all have part of ourselves that need some changing. This is an wonderful piece of writing...

[Christina May Shanaberg]

Stanza 3 Line 6--that I am not proud "are" there

Even the best of men, can do with a little self-evaluation, sometimes. Take stock, make amends, and redirect.

I felt that this poem was well written and deal with unique subject matter! A+!!

[Ruth]

The boundaries of what a human can take are overestimated at times, this is a great poem xx

[Tomás Ó C..]

Have you any newer stuff to post Barry?