James stumbled through into the next room. It was almost totally empty, and had a shiny feel to it. Cold air blew through the walls. James reached over to one of the walls and examined it. The walls were porous. James reached his hand for the door and quickly pilled back, sensing the sting of the hypodermic needle though his good left arm. Slowly, he started to make out the gleam of hypodermic needles in the room. Some were easy to find, as they were caked in blood. The others seemed to have been replaced recently. Even the floor was covered in needles. The disgruntled cabbie appeared in the room, floating off the floor. “You got off easy…” he snarled at James. “But the following are going to be way tougher than the previous one. You want to see?” he asked. Before James could reply, the cabbie clicked his fingers and the corpses of several people appeared right over the blood caked needles. James opened and closed his mouths in horror. The cabbie grinned, and licked his fingers. The cadavers disappeared and were replaced by the putrid scent of sulphur. As the ground blazed to life, the ground shook in the throes of a massive earthquake, pushing the floor up in uneven sections. “Now get across…” said the cabby before disappearing into the flames, an echo of an evil laugh resounding behind him.
James took a tentative step, and saw the needles strike upwards. The toe of the expensive loafer was sheared off and the needles arced high before returning and falling into the holes. James started running. Several needles ripped into his back. But the pure adrenaline of the running sustained him. Fortunately they were only needles… and not barbed harpoons. The needles that ripped through his back now returned for the kill. James kept on running. The needles were close behind, and reached for the exposed back of James. Flames licked at the shreds of his tuxedo. They caught fire, and he shrugged it off, throwing the flaming jacket into the path of the needles. The needles plunged into the thick material of the tux. James swore. The tux was a rental. If the cabbie didn’t kill him, the owner of the jacket would.
Then, the holes in the floor started getting bigger. Some were as big as a man. Others were as big as his torso. The ones as big as his wrist shot harpoons and the ones that were as big as a man shot missiles. James kept running, his body pumping adrenaline into his body, giving him the burst of power. He kept on running. Then, the edge of the cliff loomed into view. The missiles and harpoons were almost upon him. What could he do? The missile’s fireball would incinerate anything that he threw at it. There was no other option. He had to jump. It was either a death by falling, or a death by painful impalation. He threw himself over the cliff as the missiles collided on the point where he had been just a second ago. The massive fireball incinerated the harpoons, and sent him plummeting over the edge. Then, he landed in something squishy.
The dark room stank of sweat and reeked of cigar smoke. It all seemed to James like the interrogation room of a bad movie. The voice rumbled. “Do you, James Cutler swear to god to tell the truth, the whole truth and only the truth?” James saw the cabbie, wearing a perfectly coifed wig and the robe of a judge around his grimy shoulders. The judge bore down on James. “I am the final task. Beat me…” the cabbie paused a moment to let the words sink in, then resumed “But no body has defeated me. Not ever, not now, and definitely not you…” the cabbie finished his sentence and brought the gigantic wooden gavel down onto the wooden floor. James could do nothing but stand and watch. The gavel sped towards him. He dropped to the floor and rolled, off the wooden plaque. The boom of the hammer threw him backwards, into a corner. He felt his wrist crack. The numb right hand still clutched the small crucifix from the time of his death. It felt warm, reassuring. “god give me the strength I need…” he prayed. James looked down as the cabbie reached a gigantic hand for him. It was only then that James realized, tiny maggots wriggled from the tears in the cabbie’s skin. All of a sudden, the crucifix burst into flame. The flame scorched the skin closest to James. The cabbie howled and cursed in anger, drawing back the hand, and spitting on it. James looked in disbelief. He thanked god, and prayed again. “lord… deliver me from the hand of evil, and your word shall be a double-edged sword” the crucifix burst into a silver sword, and the wooden part of it fell away. The sword bathed James in incandescent blue light, and started healing all of his wounds. Then. The cabbie looked long and hard at James. “as long as you have that sword, I have no power over you. You are free to go.” He pointed towards the last door. James suspiciously walked towards it, and then he turned around. His suspicion was correct. The cabbie’s claw like hands reached towards his face, in an impossibly long moment. James thrust the sword forwards, and there was an unearthly howl, as the cabbie disappeared into nothingness, and the world dissolved into nothingness.
When James woke up, there was a blinding white light, and he was wrapped in bandages. Beneath it all, he smiled a private smile. He was home.
really should have reviewed this earlier, methinks. it's a great story, and i loved it a lot, although i have to agree with alicia here about the paragraphs. but overall this is really nice, and more reviews are on the way!
Wonderful descriptions, you handled them perfectly! But the paragraphs seemed a little too long, like a big block of text, one after another. Maybe you could split it up a little more, especially at the parts where there is dialogue. Overall, it is an excellent job!
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