My Sister

A poem written for my sister for her birthday.

There is this friend I have come to know,
I call her my sister.
When I am with her,
I know that everything will be okay.

Her heart breaks when I am sad.
She is filled with happiness when I am glad.
No matter how far apart we are,
I know that I always have her in my heart.

We have shared many secrets,
There is nothing that is hidden.
I know that no matter what I do,
I will always have someone on my side.

We may not always get to see each other,
But when we do it’s always special.
Because time spent with sisters,
Is time that is never wasted.

God created us to be sisters.
That was His plan from the start.
I feel very blessed to have my sister,
Because I know that I am loved.

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at poetry so constructive criticism is welcomed.

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

I loved reading this poem as it hit me close to home. My sister is also my best friend, my everything. We dont have secrets we tell each other everything and I know that we have each others back no matter what. I really enjoyed your words :) For me, I would say in my style I rhyme a lot... not sure why I guess I am just comfortable with it. I was reading W R Stowe's review about the last stanza. If it was me I would have went with something like this....

God created us as sisters
That was His plan from the start
I am blessed to have my sister
Nothing can ever tear us apart

Not much difference but like I said I tend to rhyme a lot and I think by saying nothing can ever tear us apart you imply that there is an unbreakable love between sisters. Just a thought :)

I still love it the way it... sometimes... if you read some of my writings I write exactly what I feel and just don't care what anyone else thinks. I know its pure right from my heart and with a topic such as this I make sure I am happy with it and that's what matters :) Sorry for rambling

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you for reading! :) I appreciate it!

[Anahat]

Awee it was so sweet!
Loved it :)

[Mari K]

For a first attempt it isn't bad. In the second stanza, you did go into rhyming, but then dropped it in the the others. I think either way is fine, but for flow, you should choose one or the other. My first attempt at poetry was probably dismal and Im glad I don't remember. lol Keep writing and reading poetry. The more exposure you have, the easier it will become once you have a grasp on what it generally looks like. That being said, I like the feelings you brought out in me. Though my natural sister and I don't speak, I have girlfriends whom I love like they are my sisters. Thanks for sharing and keep writing!!

[Thesecuts]

Awe, this is so cute and I loved it.

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you so much :)

[Thesecuts]

No problem, could you write a review on one of my pieces? I could really use your helpful advice since I've just started and you seem really good at it. :)

[Lyric]

This is really pretty, good job

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thanks so much :)

[Lyric]

you're welcome :]

[Kead]

Excellent poem it is so cute and nice and passionable

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you :)

[Jamie]

Beautiful piece of poetry :)

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you! :)

[Jamie]

You're welcome :) Feel free to review my stuff :)

[child of God]

Beautiful poem it is wonderful to see someone appreciating they're sister lately we have been over looking there best friend a sister are the best person to be your friend thank you for sharing it was a pleasure to read

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you!!!

[Miss Sharon]

Well my dear I think you are off to a good start with your writing! Your poem about your sister is a joy to read and you are indeed blessed to share such a beautiful relationship. I love this stanza (God created us to be sisters. That was His plan from the start. I feel very blessed to have my sister, Because I know that I am loved.) Beautiful! And you both are blessed! ~Sharon

[Crazycatgirl_10]

Thank you! :)

[Emily]

Such a lovely poem!
Keep it up!!