She

She felt so much emotionally, she would say, that a physical outlet - physical pain - was the only way to make her internal pain go away. It was the only way she could control it.

Another day,

With it another tear that rolls down her eye,

As all her cries get lost…

In the noisy emptiness of the world,

And the deafening silence inside.

 

She’s an empty shell,

One more flame,

Burnt out before her time,

Battling the winds of the worldly crimes.

 

She once had the brightest smile,

Now just dark lifeless eyes.

Lost her spark to the world,

That broke her down piece by piece until only fear survived.

 

She fights pain with pain,

As cold metal presses against her skin,

Bringing out the warmth…

Her drug, to the raging tempest within.

 

Getting ready to cut again,

She looks back at the time gone by.

When a thought comes to her mind-

“What If I end my worthless life?”

 

With that in mind, she writes a note-

‘I love you mom, but I can’t take this anymore.

I hope I didn't die in vain…

I wish the world learns and bows its head in shame.’

 

And then she splits her wrists!

 

The last drops drip down,

Painting the picture of a wasted life.

 

Mumbling the words-

“Bring the motionless veil ‘O’ heaven”

She finally smiles, breathing her last sigh.

Author's Note

Okay, first I am sorry i havent read any of my read requests in a while.
Had an awfully busy month with exams and assessments.
Will try to catch up.

And this poem is inspired by cutters, who cut because they are not appreciated and are bullied!

All feedback is appreciated.
Thank you.
Enjoy.

Reviews

[Confuser]

Slice, Twice, Wrist, Knife, Life: Had to write those words before they disappeared from my mind, poof! I REALLY enjoyed it. You are quite a writer. I thought it was beautiful -excellent imagery and although a scary subject one I'm so glad you wrote. The world is so crazy and does drive kids to end their life. From the beginning to the end, it had my full attention. You painted quite a picture and I truly felt sad and could relate the the emotional turmoil of the character. Excellent imagery! I loved it! The reason I wrote the words above was because the line: And then she splits her wrists is great, but I do believe you can make it better. I hope you're not angry with a suggestion. I am so new to writing: I've only did this a couple of time and we don't know each other. And I just wish the words were more I suppose, quick, like she did, robotic, but with emotions. This is an amazing poem! I went back and read it again. You are a great writer. Thank you again.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you so much for such a wonderful review. Positive criticism is always accepted and appreciated. Truth be told I have been trying to find a better suited line to replace the one you mentioned but nothing I come up with fits. So yeah! And once again thank you for such a generous review.

[Confuser]

Wow, thank you. Was very uncertain and nervous about writing a suggestion. Still love the poem. T/Y again.

[Echoes of Eros]

This makes me ache, having friends who cut themselves to bleed out the pain. So emotionally stirring and striking in the soul. Awakens the desire in me to reach out more, somehow. xo

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you dropping by Eros.
I am glad this piece stirred some emotions in you, well after all that is the greatest compliment any writer can ever get.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Well that's a very intense subject that was unfortunately a part of my life. People that I loved hurt themselves out of a need to make everything vanish away. It wasn't always easy to be a shelter but I was glad that even something trivial as listening helped them out. It gives me chills that "She" lost her fight. I'm amazed by your wonderful word choice and the way you clearly presented the scences of pure agony. Well done!

[Angad Waraich]

Yes this is a very unfortunate part of a lot of our lives.
And well i am really honoured that you liked my word choice because i am truly an admirer of the way you weave words into your stories so thank you so much.

[Jeannette Lunete]

You're very welcome. :)

[Patricia]

I really appreciate that some people take the time to write and read about a critical subject like this. Really painful and sad that this actually happens. Really well written thank you for sharing!

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and appreciating.
Positive feedback just encourages me to write more so thank you once again.

[Arshia]

Painful it is to see that so many people end their lives on losing all hope!
All the emotions were strongly portrayed in your poem :)
Good work!

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and appreciating.

[Ashira Macy]

How terribly sad! I didn't expect this to have a happy ending, but I didn't expect her to kill herself in the end either. It is awful how all-consuming depression can be. I know first hand, and it is scary to have such thoughts. I think you painted a picture of the constant pain people can feel very well.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading Ashira.
And well its sad how consuming self harm can be.

[Gurleen Saluja]

nicely worded. intensely painful and poignant. Thanks for sharing.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my friend.

[Gurleen Saluja]

you are welcome :)

[TheLostMind]

Loved it. Its like you are showing us a movie, feels real and palpable. I loved the lines -
"And then she splits her wrists!

The last drops drip down,
Painting the picture of a wasted life."
They are very powerful. Another good write, kinda dark / sad, but good. :)

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you lost.
This is a dark piece and a sad one too because self harm is growing by the minute.
And i am glad the piece gripped you theway it it did .
Thank you for appreciating my friend.

[MsJewel]

Dark and deep, your words are heart wrenching to say the least. What makes them even more so sad is the fact that this is a reality for so many young people. Something I struggle to understand...
I think what impresses me most about this poem is the emotion you shared which leaves the reader (this reader) feeling so much compassion for this troubled soul.

Julie

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you so much for the review Julie.
And yes i too fail to grasp why cutting is becominga trend. Its almost becoming a fashion statement, band that makes me sad.

But your words are appreciated as always.

[MsJewel]

My pleasure Angad

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am usually not a fan of poems about cutting...but usually they just show the slicing and not much depth other than the cuts.

this gives true reasons why some feel their only friend is what cuts them so they can bleed away from this life...and find solace somewhere else.

this is so intense...and as i read it, my hope was hers..."hope i don't die in vain"---

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you so much for reading and appreciating sir.

[M.A.Rathore]

This is really a fantastic poem with superb imagery and deep content and the way you express your feelings having seen the cutter cutting . This is really a live story. I just live it...

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you sir.

[M.A.Rathore]

You too..hope you shall motivate me on my efforts on poems..