Angels

ANGELS
I happened to look upon an angel one night,
An angel so beautiful and in all her might,
I stood awed and mesmerized at her sight.
But little did i know that even angels harbour a darker side.

The devil too was once an angel they say,
So is it wise to gamble with your heart your love this way.
I closed my eyes and took that Leap of faith.
I caught her as she feel and held her as she wept.

Burnt wings and broken pride.
Betrayed by the god she loved with all her might.
Lost faith in all human kind.
A fire of vengeance lurks behind those eyes.

Is she my salvation or my doom instead? 
Befallen angels look for love they say,
I Tried to free her of her eternal damnation.
And thus loved her with all my might.

Held her hand and walked her through a hell ablaze,
Never looked back never thought twice.
But now i do,

Trapped in the dark hole you left me in.

I made peace with her demons but she ran at the first sight of mine.
I finally crawled out and made it out alive
Maybe its true
Angels do harbour a darker side.

Forgave love so she wouldn't have to help me fight my fight
The halo , the wings aren't worth that prize
So she leapt and soon was one with the sky
And every once in a while i see her fly by .

It is true angels do harbour a darker side.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[S. D. Forogar]

An interesting read, telling a powerful and insightful tale! I have a bit of Good and Bad to impart here, below.

The GOOD: As above, this is a great tale, one speaking of perhaps a strong experience, and so I praise it for this. The manners in which the narrator relates to the "angel," and even the characters depicted, are quite believable and relatable, and the truth of this situation is immediately evident in the emotion of the narrator.

The BAD: I wasn't too fond of the amateurish vocabulary used, and believe this piece would have struck a lot more powerfully with me if more impressive, vivid terminology were used. As well, some grammatical errors are present in the piece which are frequent enough to present issue, but beyond that, I did enjoy the message the piece had to tell.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading!

[Sami Khalil]

I like how you portray angels with duality. A wonderful poem...:)..............

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Its much appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)......................

[Myle Rent]

somehow and somewhere in my heart i can relate. nice.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank youfor reading and reviewing.
And i am glad you could relate

[Lyn Anderson]

The Angel as both good and evil. I love this, because this is a perceptive and thoughtful piece.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank youfor reading and reviewing

[B.J]

Wonderful, you create active imagery of the Angel. Well done

[Angad Waraich]

Thank youfor reading and reviewing

[B.J]

Great work...I applaud your poem

[A. Amos]

This was brilliantly written...well done my friend!

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you.
Appreciate you taking time to read this.

[A. Amos]

You're welcome buddy

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

[RAOrourke]

I really loved how the first stanza just flowed and mesmerized me with your words, it was lighter in the beginning and became darker as I read which is true to life and what you are speaking about. Well done!

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. Woman can be many things. Angels or demons.
"And every once in a while i see you fly by .
Angels do indeed harbour a darker side."
A wise man keep his distance from the un-true angels. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Bluefire]

Very interesting. It seems more like a story than a poem to me though. Could use some editing, but other than that it was amazing.
Well done! ^^

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[Emily]

Love the wording! Well done.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you!

[Rene Salinas]

This is tough for me to review as this is based on imagination and not on theology and as such well it looses objectivity and what it is been described her as an angelical presence might as well be just a presence. The could have been called Vishnu and Brahma it would have not made a bit of differennce if anything Vishnu the destructor and Brhama creator would have been closer to the image described than ,Seraphims , Cherubins or Angelois to mention a few. I am pretty sure that the answer will be I did not mean to use "real" angels as an image ... . Aside from that Image issue for me the rhyme is friendly and the narrative again one that most would relate to as the description centres around the imbuing into the darker side.

I get it in your world angels harbour a darker side ...... Very imaginative.


Thankyou

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for the honest opinion !this
Though its not imaginative, this is a metaphorical representation of some of my experiences.
But yes it does come off more fiction than as a real life scenario .
Thank you