Angels

ANGELS
I happened to look upon an angel one night,
An angel so beautiful and in all her might,
I stood awed and mesmerized at her sight.
But little did i know that even angels harbour a darker side.

The devil too was once an angel they say,
So is it wise to gamble with your heart your love this way.
I closed my eyes and took that Leap of faith.
I caught her as she feel and held her as she wept.

Burnt wings and broken pride.
Betrayed by the god she loved with all her might.
Lost faith in all human kind.
A fire of vengeance lurks behind those eyes.

Is she my salvation or my doom instead? 
Befallen angels look for love they say,
I Tried to free her of her eternal damnation.
And thus loved her with all my might.

Held her hand and walked her through a hell ablaze,
Never looked back never thought twice.
But now i do,

Trapped in the dark hole you left me in.

I made peace with her demons but she ran at the first sight of mine.
I finally crawled out and made it out alive
Maybe its true
Angels do harbour a darker side.

Forgave love so she wouldn't have to help me fight my fight
The halo , the wings aren't worth that prize
So she leapt and soon was one with the sky
And every once in a while i see her fly by .

It is true angels do harbour a darker side.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[S. D. Forogar]

An interesting read, telling a powerful and insightful tale! I have a bit of Good and Bad to impart here, below.

The GOOD: As above, this is a great tale, one speaking of perhaps a strong experience, and so I praise it for this. The manners in which the narrator relates to the "angel," and even the characters depicted, are quite believable and relatable, and the truth of this situation is immediately evident in the emotion of the narrator.

The BAD: I wasn't too fond of the amateurish vocabulary used, and believe this piece would have struck a lot more powerfully with me if more impressive, vivid terminology were used. As well, some grammatical errors are present in the piece which are frequent enough to present issue, but beyond that, I did enjoy the message the piece had to tell.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading!

[MsJewel]

Dark and yet a beautiful romantic poem. Very creative. I enjoyed reading this very much!

:) Julie

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you.

[MsJewel]

My pleasure

[hardeep sabharwal]

An interesting and lovely read here, you have written and elaborated well, nice job :)

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you.

[Tom]

Yes indeed love is quite often blind and all consuming and sometimes those that our pure in heart can get quite badly burned, even by an Angel who may not be all she seems ?

A soulful, melancholic tale, penned with alluring emotive style !

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you.

[Coyote Song]

A very dark, romantic yet sad tale. We all hope for love but sometimes the one we love can't love us back like we want. As wit the angel in your story. I really enjoyed this a lot. Very impressive work.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and appreciating.

[Coyote Song]

You're welcome. I really do like it.

[Angad Waraich]

:) Again Thank you

[Lover of loveliness]

Lovely poem... A vision of an Angel would catch us all by surprise . Sadly though she fell. The more I read this the more I wonder ....as humans we too can present to the world like angels yet in our souls where only God can see , we are troubled and far from peace .... May you be blessed with peace . Thanks for sharing.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Pryde Foltz]

A very profound write … I have heard it said that what changes and angel to a demon is ego … it blocks out the love. Again fabulous write.

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Erana]

This is really so beautiful
Brilliant one of my favorite poems
I love it
~E

[Angad Waraich]

Thank you so very much!

[Erana]

You are most welcome
~E

[MomzillaNC]

Really evocative imagery and interesting themes. The story you weave is compelling.

NOTES: A few suggestions for meter and to hold the same perspective throughout
So is it wise to gamble with your heart your love this way?
I caught her as she [fell] and held her as she wept.
"Befallen" is action -- "fallen" is descriptive
Never looked back… never thought twice.
But now [I'm] trapped in the dark hole [she] left me in
I made peace with [her] demons
but [she] ran at the first sight of mine.
Forgave love so [she wouldn't] have to help fight my fight
The halo, the wings aren't worth that prize
[She] leapt and soon [she] was one with the sky
And every once in a while [I] see [her] fly by.
Angels do indeed harbour a darker side.

[Angad Waraich]

Okay .
Thank you!
Much appreciated

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Hope it was helpful.

[Daydreamer]

I can appreciate the contrast and conflict you expressed in this poem. Such complexity, and great depth.
Angels do indeed harbor a dark side....