The disturbances that life create affect our mind but sometimes we should tell ourselves-"let It be."
Flames of water are not possible, Tides of fire are just not feasible Let it be.
Losing cool and hiding.
Trust me , a real good thought, Shatter the rules, do what you ought. Let it be.
Keep together the values,
Teachings and knowledge. Again there are a lot of dues. Let it be.
Love something.
Hate nothing Bond everything, remember good. Memorize the best. Forgive the bad. Let it be.
Fall but rise.
Don't look back. Stay in the cave,make a hole Focus the light, feel the warmth. If not this, Stay dark, not in the cave but in the night. Matters not. Dark or light. Its just day and night. Let it be.
The opening two lines are superb, it sure does the task of urging the reader to read more into your poem. There is a lot of wisdom hidden in those short lines. While I understand your message is to urge people to accept things as they are, we have to keep in mind that we are not ideal beings. Mistakes do happen. Other than that, a great read.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks a lot. And i truly am happy that you understood the meaning and realized what I wanted to con.. read moreThanks a lot. And i truly am happy that you understood the meaning and realized what I wanted to convey.
The opening two lines are superb, it sure does the task of urging the reader to read more into your poem. There is a lot of wisdom hidden in those short lines. While I understand your message is to urge people to accept things as they are, we have to keep in mind that we are not ideal beings. Mistakes do happen. Other than that, a great read.
Posted 4 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
4 Years Ago
Thanks a lot. And i truly am happy that you understood the meaning and realized what I wanted to con.. read moreThanks a lot. And i truly am happy that you understood the meaning and realized what I wanted to convey.
While I appreciate the message of the poem, the flow seems a bit off. There is little cohesion between a line and the line before and after it. Because of that, it feels more of a list of just some random inspiring words glued together.
Thanks for reviewing my work. Yeah I will work on that cohesion more. Thanks for your suggestion. I .. read moreThanks for reviewing my work. Yeah I will work on that cohesion more. Thanks for your suggestion. I meant to clearly convey a message through a short poem and that is why I Ignored the rhyming scheme. Although I will work on it again and present my next work soon, keeping your suggestions in mind. Thank you very much.
4 Years Ago
Ignoring a rhyming scheme doesn't really make it more or less comprehensive, though it is easier to .. read moreIgnoring a rhyming scheme doesn't really make it more or less comprehensive, though it is easier to make. I also like non-rhyming poems as I feel it expresses your feelings or message a lot better when you aren't restricted.
Also, don't rush yourself when you want to write great poems. Find something personal for you and express your emotions through the poem.
Maybe you can even read my poem as an example... hahaha jk I'm not a hardcore poet but I would appreciate if you did read my poem as well.
4 Years Ago
Ya I will surely read your poems. Actually I am not basically a poet or something like that. My wor.. read moreYa I will surely read your poems. Actually I am not basically a poet or something like that. My work is mainly concerned in philosophy. You may read my other articles. What I write is just a manifestation of my thoughts at a particular moment. I never edit any of my poem, once I write it. I believe that is the true beauty of words. They are something which are created by our soul at that precise moment when we concentrate or try to put together our feelings on paper.
I am almost 18. I have always thought about motivating people. My aim is to be a writer and a motivational speaker. I generally write about achieving idealism. I believe that each human has something .. more..