Daughter

contest "Simply Write Thoughtless Write"

I think
sitting here
warm body
in my arms
your breath
quick heartbeat
beautiful eyes
closed
you
lie asleep
and I don't know
how life was ever
lived without you
your small soft hand
against my breast
your sweet mouth
nose, ears, fingers, toes
I think
when do we start
hating our bodies,
our selves?
because you are
so perfect!
I want you
to know that,
I want you
to feel that
you are amazing
your body knows
just what to do
it is nature
I start to feel that
somersault
in my chest,
my eyes tear up
at the thought of you
at the sight of you
for the love of you
that can't be described
it's more than I
have ever felt
more than I
ever deserved
this incredible being,
my daughter

Reviews

[G. K. Bostic]

This is so touching and beautiful. I felt those same things when my first son was born (and each of them actually), and remember to this day, though my oldest son is 41! Now I look at my youngest grandchild and see her perfection. This touched my heart. Exquisite!!!

[spence]

Beautiful. I have two daughters and even though as a man I will never quite feel the depth of the gender bond between mother and daughter, (and subsequent fears for future development, simply because i don't know what it's like to be female) I can relate to the emotional aspects of this. It truly is impossible to remember how we lived without them and that line, 'I don't know how life was ever lived without you,' sums up my own base feelings perfectly. I'm getting flashbacks from their births and the first time I held my daughters now- reminds me why I tolerate such stress at this time of year too!
Very nice, I hope you and your family have a wonderful christmas,
spence

[.]

God-tears in my eyes;
"my eyes tear up
at the thought of you
at the sight of you
for the love of you
that can't be described
it's more than I
have ever felt
more than I
ever deserved
this incredible being,
my daughter"
~~nostalgia personified~
...i could see my daughter when she was little the entire
time i was reading this~this is very grand-very affecting-Lovely !!!
(my goodness-magnificent)

* ;) * ---amazing!

[anyone.anywhere]

Aww, loved this. Reminded me of when my daughters were small, and that feeling of love. Great poem!

[Lovely Lady]

Oh so lovely.... imagine the smile on my face as i read this. Imagine the smile she will have when she is old enough to read and understand this. I imagine the smiles she gives you! Always~
~lovely

[Brian W. Hastings]

This is a great poem. Makes me want to be a dad even more.