Earthshatter

Such heaven droppin'
In all these dreams lofting soft and often
Never stoppin' all that seems to crop in
Open poppin' poppy hoppin'
An opiumbrella bloomin' atop
A sky boomin' wide in a world never stoppin'
Reign down in droplets of heaven that stain
All of the windows still dropping with pane

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the abstract...i was foot stompin' to the beat..."dreams lofting soft and often"

favorite line...

all the flowers open up like achieved dreams and we bask in the glory of nature, life...and what we are lucky enough to have and enjoy....reminds me of a line in sheryl crow's song...."it's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got!"

the droplets of syllables in this make a perfect rhythm...and i really like the double meaning of "pane" in the last line.

[Jen Walters]

interesting poem here; lots of great rhythm and rhyme. Imagery is a little vague but not bad, I love this poem thanks for sharing

[Crispy]

A very perceptive and apt review... thank you~

[Jen Walters]

You're quite welcome, I am sorry to have not gotten back to you sooner. I have had internet issues that have kept me from getting on the net. I deeply appreciate your kind comments. Have a great day.