Ten Min.

Time crunch crush

Select a audience, Only one now,
(Some may want more)
If you like, ( Now how can a soul like ?)
The ring, ( No, not the bath tub one or the beard in the sink )
Yes kinda like the ring around the roseys,
Pocket full,
No that's not a pack of life savers,
Yes I am happy to see you.
Now slow down focus on the light reflecting off ...
Your pearl snaps.
No, slow one at a time...
Only one left now.
The fan will chill.
Does chill , I see ,no spice but ..
Yes, you are cold.

Author's Note

For Freida. Riveter .

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i find this write fascinating ....the bitter cold ending...the chill as the poem progresses...the hesitation...select an audience--then recite your poem, and will they listen? will they make a ring around the poet and be enraptured...or..will they all walk away.

jacob

[lee von cleef]

and they all walked away , then I said and ,"disturbing the peace" and they all came back. John Prine ? No Guthrie "Alice's Restaurant Massacree" (pronounced "mass-a-cree"), 18 plus minuets of A side, Yelled Freebird a time or two 14 plus minuets of beauty.

[icelandicblue]

So many rings aren't there. Which one will we perform in today? The ring coupled with pearl snaps...couldn't help but think wedding. I always enjoy your cryptic poems because they have so many faces.

[lee von cleef]

Duality for comparison, sweet n sour, contrasting, two sides of sensation,magnets ,electricity,ego sticks the speed of light, but it is not constant, ah another dirty law.

[Sami Khalil]

Going for the kill in a time crunch enviroment. That is how we do it in sports...LOl
A wonderful one...:)...............

[lee von cleef]

Oh Mercer.....

14Mercer
Bears
(27-8)
Duke3
Blue Devils
(26-9)
78 - 71
Final

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...You are welcome...:)......................

[Lydia Shutter]

Will they listen? Only the Shadow knows for sure, Lee. There is a stream of consciousness in this one that drew me in. I enjoyed it. Lydi**

[lee von cleef]

Snow flake, the single, the one love, the butterfly ,yes all metamorphosis lost...

[KAin]

This was just fun for me to read...
There's a great deal of questions emerging from every other line, and there's a bittersweet feeling in the final lines, that somehow causes the rest of the poem to both blossom and collapse at once.
Excellent work!

[Einstein Noodle]

burning itches need a scratching :) trembling fumbling almost vain attempts at taking time ... intriguing last line for me ... love the enigmatic quality of this ...
E.

[lee von cleef]

Yes out of context, the last line is a arrow too direct, for Freida reads alive full of warm smokey beauty. But in context it compliments the adolescent button bobbling of youth. Thank you for the peak.

[Horizon K.]

This makes me think of a slow undressing, almost too slow, where the mind snaps and jumps to and fro... No, focus simply on the pearls, the skin, the shift of air and it's cold... This makes me think... I am, thinking...
Very cool, Lee...

[lee von cleef]

Again my fixation slips out on the page, I just can't attend the 20, eeek 30 year reunion, Those gals are all so young in my mind, how ? , why ?, would I risk replacing the metal beauty of memory. Thank you Horizon you are a worldly beauty too.

[Horizon K.]

Lol... thanks Lee... And my pleasure... You are always so unique and fascinating to read!