No, Promise...

No promise,
No promise,
No, Promise...
But a heart looks for light.
Even if the mind won't let the rays in.
Even when the TVA takes it all away.
So others can have light,
The heart of our home now deep,
From the bottom cold green bubbles beneath the dam,
Boil out and through the turbines,The rolling wall-cloud of,
Spin, of colors,
Out past,
"No Fishing" signs,
And me, I dive into the electric cauldron,
Sucking in short breaths of air,
Trying to smile, wishing others would follow.
Covering up the slap of hard water,
On my nuts,turning me green,
Sick,
But looking up,
Their Youth just arches,
A row of narrow streams on my head.

Author's Note

T V A = Tennessee Valley Authority The "New Deal" When you stand up, Don't think they will follow, you will be alone.But Stand, for it is your Right.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

So often personal pain, wretchedness, veils what we want to see and give, but the best of us, or rather, the best of whats inside, needs. absolutely needs, to give so that others feel better, happier And In the giving we somehow feel a little comfort-dust for self, and, somehow, survive. Even that hurts but .. hurt makes for strength, sometimes, even tho we don't see it that way. Prayers, thoughts.. As ever your poetry kick starts thoughts, make us see things from different sides. helps understanding to grow more. You have a style that's completely you.

[lee von cleef]

I hope the "diversity" adds to a readers window.... Thank you Emma Joy .

[SHEEMA HUQ]

There is an all action, unified, industrious feel to this write, which for me was both intriguing and fascinating, great!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love the thought that the heart looks for light even when the mind cannot le it in wonderful work loved it

[lee von cleef]

A wild western welcome, Thank you, you broom-skirted bombshell!

[Cherrie Palmer]

all blue jeans, boots and t shirts this week we're cut'n hay

[Cherrie Palmer]

:)

[lee von cleef]

Look out for those armadillo holes, don't let that tractor buck you off !

[lee von cleef]

Hydrate hydrate ,water water beer beer, water oops a beer or two slipped out.

[Cherrie Palmer]

lol- yes I drink lots of water I drive a old zetor that has a great canopy over it

[sonnetmoon]

Your poem is really inspiring. I hope you write more.

[lee von cleef]

Thank you, I will and so should you.....Naughty or nice.

[sonnetmoon]

Naughty or nice? haha

[lee von cleef]

Right any love is good love, "Boy George"

[Ken Simm.]

The journey tthrough the struggle that becomes the whole of the thing. The step fprwrd and two back feeling. This is what I get from this excellent write..

[lee von cleef]

Thank you Ken, Not like your Kites floating through the sky. But struggle we do.

[John]

The comma after No inserts a note of defiance. The water may be dammed and the sign warn against fishing' but the rebel will out and plunge straight in. What the poem does is not just simple describe a rebellious act but tells us what the process is like - the struggle to defy, the reservations before taking that plunge and then the consequence of our action, which may not necessarily result in a simple victory, which fiction simplistically tends to promote, but in a victory nevertheless because we have defied what has been holding us back.

[lee von cleef]

Patton and you are similar to the art of motivational speaking.

[John]

Though I speak after the act; he before!

[Sheila Kline]

It is a life of give and take.....sometimes the give amounts to much more than the take - this is when we feel the deepest pangs of sadness! You have expressed this sentiment in a way that makes one stop and take notice of the trade offs!

[lee von cleef]

Thank you Sheila,the struggle of give and take eb and flow ,keeps us engaged in the growth, P S smart looking gal you are !

[Aethereal]

This is a well stated expression about the price of progress. We must always ask ourselves if the trade-off between our ecology and our technological desires is a good one. Good poetic flow here.

[lee von cleef]

Kind of a work in progress,But I wanted to post while it was fresh,Thank you....