All She Wants

words that bind

all she wants is...
a call
just one call,
a call to let her know
I thought
before I crossed the line...

I stopped wearing our ring
They turned off the phone at home

all she wants
is a call
haunting my thoughts ...
my body feels life, fresh, dancing,glancing ,tugging on me,to run,to roll,to be,to give...
All she wants
is a call
just one call,
before I cross the line...
what a promise I made...
Thanks, I'll just walk on home
I'll just walk on
on home

What we give
we take home

Author's Note

Time weaves its weight in a relationship....even after....

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi, I hope all is well. This one feels complete while posing a plethora of questions and indicating, even that this is perhaps a part of a wider sequence...which tells us over time or perhaps a piece of the intricate complexities of this particular relationship, thanks.

[lee von cleef]

Unanswered prayers, the questions roll on , I will one day address them as you ask. Then maybe I can find a solution.

[Mark]

is communication the antidote? without saying, I feel the angst, and perhaps guilt, weaved in this work.

[Cherrie Palmer]

...before I cross the line.. it is hard to hold on to that promise at timesm but hold fast cause you can never uncross that line.- great message wrapped in a rhyme.

[lee von cleef]

Thank you Cherrie, you are an inspiration,Like Emma,I keep looking at the different weights in this poem,and they change , Today I am lingering on the "I need you" place in my heart,and the you is me.

[MOON]

Our inability to articulate to say how we feel before we cross the line and can't turn back. The simple act of communication all she needs is a call and maybe finding a way back to ourselves.poignant write.

[lee von cleef]

Yes , if we know who we are, if we have the strength to be.

[Marissa]

This is nice,but your gonna wanna capitalize the first letter of the first word on every line. On some places I would make it flow a little better just my opinion though. Nice Job!

[Muse]

Every now and then, I think we all think about the one thing that he/she wants. It seems so simple...but out of reach. We become lethargic in our ways. A promise made sleepy.

[emmajoy]

Have read this three times, trying to decide what it hides because it certainly seems to have a wrapping around it, albeit it a very beautiful and melodic wrapping. Not going to delve or dive but just say this points somewhere special and, to someone more than special. Emotional, touching.

[Shellie]

I like the content. I didn't really connect with it, but I like the way its written especially the last two lines...they keep repeating in my head like a motto.

[spiritwind]

Longings
they bedevil us with their siren songs
even when our hearts are not totally into abandonment
our bodies tug at us
our little self cries out that we deserve a little out of the box time
a little of what others have had and never suffered for
pity our frail human selves
you wrote with sheer honesty

[lee von cleef]

and you too,doing what the cafe does best, a emotional platform, to point our toes ,breath,tilt,tuck,twist,spin,fist,now rip in the water, woosh inward splash, little bubbles string from our gills, the life pulls us to the pools lip.

[spiritwind]

hmmmm.... I have seen hints of a rodeo cowboy before in your comments... now of a diver ... this is rather fun getting to know the commenter through his comment on another's comment

[lee von cleef]

I wounder? How about if I describe a sneeze?

[Robin]

This poem has special lyrical quality that matches the sentiment in emotional counterpoint . well woven poetry

[lee von cleef]

thank you,If I could sing...