Hurts

I was thinking while I'm tired so it might not be good.

I had a code to unlock

The shield to my heart.

He found out that stupid code of mine,

Using it to lower my defenses to break my heart yet again.

Rushing me into oblivion in his heart and me..

To seriously think.. He loved me again.

So many pieces to pick back up... D****t.

Author's Note

Honest Opinion. Personally, I think it's horrible.

:/

Reviews

[Masaking]

You got to walk as far as you could or else the next time he is not going to break your heart again but worst; your death.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you set-up this poem. You told a interesting story with a good ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lilly Negoi]

it's not that bad. but i think i've read much better things written by you :) try to polish it a bit!

[Machiavelli]

i wouldnt say horrible but i think you can do better try again you cando it *~*

[Charles]

No, it's not horrible, It's a nice little acrostic poem with a well-dropped shoe at the ending. Good work.

[Pssss I don't Exist.]

Not horrible, but it could be WAY better. Honestly I think it would be better if it had more rhyming in it. I know its hard for some people but it really makes your poetry better....

[Sunflower 20]

i like the style you chose to write in, its like finding a hidden message right in front of your eyes, well done. but i do think it can be brushed up a little...

[Eileen]

Hmm. I don't think it's HORRIBLE, but it could be better. Poems like this to me seem like something I'd do in class.

[Calypso]

Good write. The words it form was clever.

[sarah]

THIS IS AMAZING!! I love this