Lucid

A half awake vivid dream (lucid dreaming)

Under the arch of paradise, 
Sore eyes cry!
Laden beings with heavy hearts
Surely die!
From endless nights,
Soulless ghouls arise!
And I awaken from terror's dreams
More alive!


(c) 2016 on poetrydig.com

Author's Note

all your comments, suggestions are welcome

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Waooooo!
I loved this!
great work Man!
:)

[Neal S]

Just wow!!! Man this is a great piece. Really dig this!!

[costa siwale]

thanks a lot man..much appreciated. thank you

[Mr. Lopez]

This was short but sweet and definitely has the feel of a dream. For that reason I believe that you can expand upon the already good idea. Don't get me wrong here, I really did like it. But the good thing about writing about a dream is that the rules of sensibility don't apply. Allowing you to be as creative and even abstract as your imaginations will take you. I personally write ,edit and rewrite my own ideas and poetry over and over. You are obviously very skilled and your imagination is undeniable. Play with it and let it run wild my friend.

[costa siwale]

Thank you so much for the comment Mr Lopez. Some notable points that you put across, i will take them in to consideration as i write another. thank for taking the time to read.

[Mr. Lopez]

I just posted a poem called In A Dream . It's a little goofy but it's kind of what I was talking about. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

my friend you have talent i love that organic flow of your words and your breath taking imagery that captures my mind so few words with it's whimsical story.

[costa siwale]

i thought it may have been to short, but am glad you liked it, and thank you for reading

[EvaThornburn]

I hate how nightmares cling on even after we wake up. So scary. I find I can never go back to sleep after having one. Great write. Eva

[redzone]

awakening from nightmares can certainly make you feel alive and not trapped within such a dream that is for sure... nice pix to go with as well... enjoyable poem Costa, hope your dreams are less terrifying...

redzone

[costa siwale]

Your comments are always refreshing Mr Redzone. and 'yes' my dreams are way less terrifying. hahaha thank you sir