Inhumans

Child Abuse

"She shivers on stained sheets
Folded in like a fetus"
A bang! On the door!
jangles the hinges.
She coils her frame,
thin, as a blade of grass

He staggers in!
Eyes and growl! Of a devil.
Her wince,
a broken, voiceless echo.

Stars and moon gaze away
while the monster stays to 'prey'

Author's Note

all your comments are welcome. thank you

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

I like the way the verses get shorter. It sort of indicates that we would like to see less of this kind of abuse. You put it very well . Clever last two lines.

[Geo Lawrence]

its a horrific imagery...great write.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

The conclusion of this piece hits like a punch in the gut! Great write!

[costa siwale]

thank for taking the time read Poetic, much appreciated

[Srindhi Arasu]

Nice work . Keep it up costa

[costa siwale]

thank you friend, for taking the time.

[Drama Child]

"while the monster stays to 'prey'. The play on this word alone, beautiful and terrifying. I connect to this in such a way, it hurts to admit.
Well written, as a fan of rhyme, I love how it flows.
Thank You for sharing!

[costa siwale]

thank you for taking the time to read.

[EvaThornburn]

I use to be married to a monster like that. So happy I have a new husband that treats me like a queen. Great write. Look forward to reading more. Eva

[costa siwale]

Am glad you are treated like a queen, women deserve that, unfortunately many are not. Thank you for reading Eva, thanks

[Anindita Janhabee]

Colours add something more into this...
what a nice topic to be touched and flowed flawlessly...
I appreciate your thoughts and way of writing... The words tell more than sentences... Very well done sir. ..
I like this one... : )
Anindita : )

[costa siwale]

Again, thank you for reading. Your comments give such high spirits. Thank you ms Anindita

[Anindita Janhabee]

most welcome.. : )

[Jay free]

Brilliant!! So descriptive and well done with the imagery presented so accurately and the poetic drive completes the story fuelling the adrenalin... I'm going to read more!!

[costa siwale]

thanks a lot Jaymz..truly means a lot.

[CD Campbell]

Really dark, Costa! This is a subject that a lot of heads would like to turn away from. Writing this reminds us of how imperfect we are as a species. Your words are forceful and I think whoever reads this will carry the echo of this piece in their hearts. CD

[costa siwale]

indeed we are imperfect, thank you for reading CD, always good to hear from you

[redzone]

we need to make such monster disappear... they don't hide under the bed or in those dark closets, but just down the hall and we thought they were the ones who loved us and would protect us from monster... this kind of abuse runs wild in the world and also involved the sex slave trade, the selling of human flesh... all these abuses we must put an end to... bringing attention to this as your poem does is part of doing this...

thanks Costa, it's a good poem

redzone

[costa siwale]

well said Mr Redzone, the atrocious acts we comment against ourselves, and for what? power, money? selfishness? in the end we defile the next generation. always good to hear your commets