The First Entry in a Dream Journal

The First Entry in a Dream Journal

A Poem by CosminDZS
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In here, I write my dreams of, rainy forests and flying over the green streets, most dearest.

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In here, I write my dreams of,

rainy forests and flying over

the green streets, most dearest. 

Out,

in the morning dew.

Where, 

I flew over you.


I could see the people

beating their carpets 

and hanging their laundry.

Out, 

in the morning dew.

Where, 

I flew over you.


See for some reason, 

I had the fancy to,

fly far away from you.

Up, 

up,

in the night sky.

I ask myself, 

why? 

Oh, why?

Why did I 

fly so far away from you?


The answer had no meaning,

when I had hit the dream ceiling.

The stars were too distant 

and the mind was resistant,

neither could manage to,

get away from you.

I fell far away from you,

down,

down,

into the morning dew.

© 2014 CosminDZS


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I felt like I saw flying while reading this. Very well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beautiful read, really enjoyed :) x

Posted 10 Years Ago


CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

Merci, I appreciate it :)
You wrote it in the way that the reader felt like they were flying with you. Extremely well done!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

I'm glad you could come on the journey with me, much thanks
Amazing, it's fair to say I was totally indulged in this piece. I've actually read it over a few times and I can't pin down exactly what it is that I enjoy so much about it- probably the fact that there's nothing to not enjoy.
Brilliant write!

Posted 10 Years Ago


CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to write such a thoughtful response!
A beautiful poem for your dream journal. I like the places you took me to and the thoughts create by the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh wow, this is lovely. For me it doesn't create an image in my mind, it kind of creates a blank canvas in my mind of black with stars zooming by and it works very well with this piece, I love it! c:

Posted 10 Years Ago


CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

Hm, that's an interesting way to look at it Anna.
Lovely little piece, it had a sort of musical element to it. Felt like it could really suit having music along with it!

Posted 10 Years Ago


CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

Heh I guess you're right, it does have a musical tone to it. Maybe I was humming a tune along with i.. read more
Couldn't you put it in both places ?
Very nice...seems a bit of a change up for you.

Enjoyed it.
Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


Scott Metro

10 Years Ago

Seems less cryptic...a little more earthbound ..less thinking involved to digest.
That's just .. read more
CosminDZS

10 Years Ago

I would agree with you on that point, I guess I'm a little cryptic sometimes. Although it seems so c.. read more
Scott Metro

10 Years Ago

:)
My pleasure my friend...
withdrawn from a magazine submission for your reading pleasure

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on January 24, 2014
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