burn.

i kissed you

and my lips

BURST

into flames

that burned

my body

from head to toe

i turned to ashes

that you kicked aside

with your shoe.

Reviews

[Bright Eyes]

I think in this case less is more. I like how you kept it short and to the point, which makes it seem really honest to me. Also it painted a very clear image in my head. Overall I think you did a really good job expressing yourself clearly because I can really understand (at least I think) what you're trying to say.

[Justin D]

by the sounds of this, you have been through many problems within your life when it comes to guys. Judging by the way you write, i guess that guys have not treated you the way you obviously deserve to be treated. You have a great mind and the rite guy will come. Good luck and keep strong
nice work :)