scenes from certain nights

summer living

Tonight the sky is a coffee-colored uncertainty
draped with shoe lace constellations,
strewn like toys across a blanket


Tonight our lake house is a pocket in the sky's mirror
caught in the magic of moonlit adoration
lying lustrous for a portion of the heavens pie

Reviews

[cest la vie]

Now this is Something.. visually beautiful...smooth read
Vry nice poem:-)

[Child]

aww heaven's pies

great fundamentals and amazingly painted scenery.

makes me want to listen to enya while reading this piece

[EliJoLee]

woww.
i pretty much adored this one.
i got this sensational visual in my head.
very cute.
good writing!!

[Barbara Walker]

This is full of beautiful imagery! Made me feel so peaceful! "Strewn like toys across a blanket" Love that! This has good rhythm and flow, too. Good write! Barbara

[Deborah Shepard]

wounderful beauty in short lines ,imagerylovely

[Vanessa]

The first thing to catch my eye was the word choice. This, I thought, was lovely.
I also noticed the fact that a cliche is rather hard to find.
This I love, mainly in this peice.

--Vanessa Alyse

[Todd]

You paint a beautiful picture in such a small amount of words. It's great. "Shoe lace constellations." I love finding people who find new ways of saying something - so often I see the same repeated descriptions of the same images, and it's refreshing to find something original. Your writing is inventive, but it is not overly-so, which can be a problem. Your metaphors are within a certain "believability." I guess I'm trying to say that they work, and they work very well. Great poem. I'll be reading more, most definitely.

[Tessa]

this is wonderful. i don't think there is one line i do not like. i love it.

[lark]

There's so much in here, it's almost too much to digest. And it's beautiful (but you know that already).

Certain nights, eh? What happened to all the rest?