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life drags on......
a six pack for each weekday
a thirty for the weekend
friends come and then leave again
cottage cheese and milk inside the fridge
head spins then sits back down again
what else?

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

short and to the point. Loved it. Has a great little tune.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

this is what i've been going through lately, it's not fun. when you in it. it stays for awhile. you only notice it was there when it leaves. this is a perfect description of that. that hamster wheel

[Barbara Walker]

Tones of tiring repetition, the mundane, boredom and do I hear disgust? An "is that all there is?" reflection of a life. That lonely milk and cottage cheese speaks volumes and I love that line..."head spins, then sits back down again". Notice I put a comma in there. When I read it, I mentally put a comma after lines two and three, a period after line four, five and six. Punctuation helps the reader in reading the poem. It can really emphasis certain aspects of a poem...or not. Since the poem asks, "What else?" I'd have to answer: life can throw us many a curve ball. We can cry, rant and rave, but, it's just being whiny if that's all we do. If we can't change whatever it is, we had best start, as soon as possible, to get into the lesson of learning to live with it. A lesson that is life-long, in my experience or at the very least, takes an extremely long time. Of course, I realize that that last part is subjective. If we CAN change it, if we love ourselves and want the positive in our life, then we will do whatever needs to be done to make that change. However, there are those who just like to whine, rant and rave. They probably like to be alone, too, as the friends they have will become exhausted from hearing it and fall by the wayside.
This poem is short, but says so very much. It must, to get me to think so much! (Isn't that what great poems do?) Great write! Barbara