Orbit

I don't write poetry very well. Please rate so I can get better.

Popping it in my mouth.

Cool sting.

Cool feel.

Hate it.

Love it.

Relax.

Relief.

Another.

Author's Note

Please tell me exactly what you think.

Reviews

[linley{luu}]

Haha, it made me think of Orbit gum! I think you are a very good poet. In my book, poetry is not about big flowery words, or even rhyming, it's about telling a story no matter how few words you use. The imagery was replaced with feeling here. I felt exactly what was being said. Very nice!

[theunknownchick]

Short but good. I think you should expand more but This is cool. Greaat Jobb♥♥

[Destinee]

I like how it's self contradicting. However, I wouldn't have used "Cool" in two consecutive lines when they are so short and when there is no other pattern of repetition. But I liked that it was short and sweet and to the point. Review one of mine?