dead fishy

childish thoughts

"fishy is dead

he drowned

from crying to much,"

 

"fishy is dead,

I've got no friend,"

 

"fishy is dead,

he never said much

is that why he cried?",

 

"fishy is dead,

he drowned

from crying too much..."

Reviews

[D. T. Wine]

Word-craft is my favorite part of a poem, and this is well crafted. I enjoyed the silliness, and seriousness at the same time. Est bene factum.

[falling_toxic_rain]

thank you very much^^

[Eric Cox]

I like the way this is penned. Youthful and conveying sadness nicely.

[falling_toxic_rain]

thanks again:)

[Sami Khalil]

A good read and write for children and adults...:)

[falling_toxic_rain]

thank you:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Griffin]

Its simple yet elegant, its message is so childish and obvious but the words grow into something that has such a deeper message that it just flows over you.

[falling_toxic_rain]

thanks you :)

[uTitta]

I really enjoyed reading this! It is just so amazing yet kind of serious in a child like way at the same time... I love it. :)

[falling_toxic_rain]

thanks!

[Wolfwind]

I could so see a 3 or 4 year old saying something like this when his goldfish dies. Brilliant! =)

Aaron

[falling_toxic_rain]

Yea, I don't know how I came up either this.
Thanks.

[JD Robin]

I really enjoyed this piece of writing and the image it conveyed.