A Person I Never Knew/A Different Side of You

(didnt know what to title this) This is a random piece of writing that i went ahead and considered a poem x/

Tonight Im sitting here alone
Wondering what ever happened to that happily ever after....
We always fantasized of living.
And Im trying to make these words
As painless as I can...
But there is just no way of making you understand.
I could think this over once more...but that would just be a waste of time.
This traffic jam up in my head...
Not letting me think of words I should have said.
Because Im simply not going to suffer anymore, forever waiting...
For you to come back...Im done with waiting by the phone,
Wondering if there's hope.
Your letters hide your damaged heart.
You simply can't admit to what you feel deep inside.
I want a better version of you,
Like the one I had to start with
I want a better version of you,
You know thats pretty much perfectly true.
It kills me so,
That I can't say I love you...anymore.
To you my pain seems invisible.
To you Im nothing more than no one.
If you even took one second...
to take a look at the world once more...
to take a look at my world, the one where you're my all...
You'd see it's not what it's supposed to be.
Claiming to be some sort of angel,
but I see a different side to you...
a person I never knew.

Reviews

[rockinmiley555]

this took all the words i wanted to say strait out of my mouth. this really explains how a lot of us need to realize that we need to move onto bigger and better things weather it be, in this sercumstance, about a realationship, a scary situation, or a death that has killed us inside. we need to learn that, yes, we are sad at the moment but 10 years from now do we really want to be exactly how we are now? we need to live our life to the fullest because we cant get it back. i really, REALLY like this one.

[Vanessa]

thanks :)
but i think its flawed because i couldnt figure out what to put in the line 'To you Im nothing more than no one.' I just put 'no one' but i think it could be better with something else... :/

[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

Random bits of writing can totally be more poetic than a lot of carefully structured pieces of straight poety :3 I loved this and how honest and unembellished it was. Great job!

[Jean]

I looove this one. =) It's really good. ^_^
Full of raw emotion and all that. :3