Oh love

Oh love

A Poem by Ashley
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this poem is about my wonderful boyfriend

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Oh love, oh love
I love you so much
from the moment I see you
to the time we touch
your voice dances in my head
sunrise, sunset
how will our lives end
good I bet

Oh love, oh love
how can it be?
I used to be trapped
but now I'm free
I'm bleeding love
just thinking of you
say four little words
I love you too

Oh love, oh love
I love you so much
from the time I see you
to the time we touch

© 2012 Ashley


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This is great, so often you read sad poems regarding love, it's nice to read something positive. Structurally I really like how you have managed to keep to the rhyme scheme without it sounding forced or contrived. I especially like the way you repeated the start at the end. I think this could be improved with formatting it into stanzas, adding commas and adding full stops where appropriate.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love this. Your wording is perfect and the meaning is amazing..just one thing. You should try adding punctuation to show where you want us to pause and such it might enhance it a little more. Just a thought. Keep it up!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the rhyming...keep writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great, so often you read sad poems regarding love, it's nice to read something positive. Structurally I really like how you have managed to keep to the rhyme scheme without it sounding forced or contrived. I especially like the way you repeated the start at the end. I think this could be improved with formatting it into stanzas, adding commas and adding full stops where appropriate.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Looks like free verse- and it is Really good!- although I'm not one for happy love poems as much.
I like how you wrote it and the words you used
Do you consider yourself good at writing poems, you should.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Ashley
Ashley

rochelle, IL



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Well...I'm Ashley :) so hello! I write, sing, dance, I color and cut my own hair. I try to stay on the positive side, and put all my anger and sadness to poetry. I have a quiet side, but get to know m.. more..

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