Lies

All those lies

That you thought you could hide

Are more annoying than some pesky flies

 

I thought I could trust you

But all you did was mask it with another fat lie

High, High

So high did I fall

 

Yet you were never there 

to catch me

I feel, I feel

I feel so dumb

for ever trusting you from the start

 

I thought I could believe you

but even my friend thinks it is you

Lies, Lies

So many lies

Don't you see that your killing me

 

Killing me inside......

Author's Note

Yes, its not really good, but I just needed to vent out. ughh I hate when people lie to me!
:(

Reviews

[Neon]

I liked the song. Keep up the good work you too!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! :)

[Neon]

Welcome!
Do you too love writing songs?

[The Invisible Girl]

Yeah, sometimes. :)

[Neon]

Me too write songs not sometimes, but MOSTLY!
Do you have a particular genre making songs?

[The Invisible Girl]

Lol! Nicee!
Um, not really. Just whatever mood I'm in. Lol :)

[Neon]

Ok!
So, Mostly in which mood you love staying to "MANUFACTURE" great songs??

[The Invisible Girl]

Hmm.. Idk prob when im lonely. Lol

[Neon]

Ok!
And I do write songs whenever a voice comes from my heart and forces me to write some words to please the beauty of hearts ... Me too don't write in any particular genre because it's yeah .. here same~"Depends on Mood~"

Poems n stories are also the part of my writing so, I do write them too.
If am not spoiling your this convo then may I ask, besides songs, what do you write?

[The Invisible Girl]

Poems and books. :)

[Neon]

I can smoothly write poems .. but when I come to "books" then Ah! Ah! Blah! Blah! Blah!
Takes my too much time and even I don't know much about books, yes, I do want to write books too, Last year, I'd tried writing a book but I couldn't complete and am still learning from other writers how to write books ...

~as we are now friends~so, as a friend, May I ask, Would you help me improving my skills writing books??
(I'll help you too in writing poems and songs, am cool at this)

[The Invisible Girl]

Haha sure and awesome!
yes, writing books requires lots of time and patience. I have a few tips that might help. :)

[Neon]

Wow! Thank you! Your so big~hearted, Invisy!
Umm... do you want to share your some tips with me, am sure your tips'd be seemed much helpful and useful writing books??

[The Invisible Girl]

Haha sure! Well what i do is make an outline and then just write. So if you go either go off or add onto the outline but still not be off track. I know some people who write the big scenes and then added stuff before or after. Hopefully this makes sense and is helpful. I might have more tips but i can't think of them at the moment. Lol

[Neon]

"Outline" means??

[The Invisible Girl]

Like a timeline of events that will happen.

[Neon]

Ha! Got it!
Okay, One more question, when we do write books or start writing the chapter then what do we think on my mind like do we write there real moments happens in life or do we write from Imagination like fantasies and so on??

[The Invisible Girl]

Whatever you want. Just make sure that it can be somewhat relatable. Making characters can also help readers connect by making them realistic.

[Neon]

Ok~Now this one really makes sound good~
When we do plot characters what we describe first about 'em??

[The Invisible Girl]

What they look like but don't do it like: she has brown hair and brown eyes.
But like Her long wavy brown hair waved in the wind like a the sails of a ship.
Dialogue can also help characterize the character. Tone is a big key in characterization.

[Neon]

WOW! ~Am Impressed much~
Because your dialogue's so real and so good and relevant as well. read moreWOW! ~Am Impressed much~
Because your dialogue's so real and so good and relevant as well.

I think, "Now I can write books too as long as we're great friends and I hope and I wish we'd be great friends."
Would we be??

[The Invisible Girl]

I think we will! Lol

[Neon]

Great to hear! Yeah, of course, we'll be great friends!
~Well~ For learning your more tips and dialogues, what should I do?

[The Invisible Girl]

Well if you ever have a question when ur writing just message me on here.

[Neon]

~Ok~
That'd be great! Thanks!

[The Invisible Girl]

Your welcome! :)

[Casey Francis]

True talent, indeed! You are a wonderful writer. I really understood how you felt. Getting feelings across to the reader can be very difficult, but you do it wonderfully!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! That means a lot to me!! :)

[Johanna]

I like it, very nice piece. Keep writing :) Thankyou for sharing! :)

[Criss ;)]

Those people should realize their mistakes or feeling shame on their lies ... I think they should do apologize to god if they lie to anyone .. because humans are the gifted of god and if they feel sorry to god , feel shame on what they done .. then their lies'd automatically be washed out and god bless them to restart the life again in a new way ... without lies .. without hurts :)

Sometimes lies make someone happy but sometimes they don't .. but when the lies hurt someone and hurts someone's heart then everyone should apologize to god if they lie to someone and run with the life peacefully :)
Nice poem, Invisible girl. Your going very good, just keep writing. Everybody's love to see you as a writer .. as an author one day with big names. 100/100 :) Keep it up!
May god bless you.

[aleena1805]

Heartfelt words are always good.. The emotions you are trying to portray are evidently etched out..

[Calissa Knox]

I could definitely relate to this,
and I felt the strong emotion all the way through.

I thought the ending stanza was really powerful,
"Don't you see that you're killing me Killing me inside......".

This was written from your heart.
Very well written, and beautifully expressed!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!!!! :D

[Calissa Knox]

It was my pleasure! :)