Our Little Oak Tree

I smiled as

we walked side by side

hand-in-hand.

like we've always done before.

 

You looked down and laughed

you grabbed me and we started to dance

With nothing on our feet

we made our own music by the crackling of the gold leaves 

scattered on the ground

 

We laughed, shouted and sang at the top of our lungs

scaring every squirrel in the trees

while the deer watch in curiosity

Soon you pulled me close and kissed me

while the leaves float down around us.

 

We continued to walk

until we found the perfect tree

It wasn't the biggest or the prettiest

but we knew it was the right one

You took your pocket knife

and with my hand on top of yours

we carved out a heart.

 

After we finished our sloppy heart

we laughed and continued to dance

 

Several years later our little oak tree became the biggest tree in the forest

Just like that oak tree, our love for each other grew stronger 

We still go to that oak tree that carries our heart

We dance on the leaves like that day before

And we rejoice for another year we are together

And for many years to come. 

Author's Note

:D

Reviews

[Rahul]

A few days earlier my teacher was asking generally about wood by which how many kind of things we can make ?
i've had one answer that was same "oak tree", i wanted to say this word because i didn't know about it much in how many ways it uses. I said that we can make some woods, furniture, medicine's and some papers, when i said paper, some others class fellow started to follow me and said paper to teacher. I was surprising that why they all're following me when i dropped some pressure on my mins then i got that paper's a common words that mostly know everyone and they didn't know more that's why they did follow me/my word...lol but when teacher was teaching us i was screaming about an oak tree. We can make some medicines too from this but i didn't say. And the rest of about an oak tree i knew from your this writing.
It is an unique write if i say because every one who wants to write about "An oak tree" writes about it's features/advantages and about so one but, you jotted down perfectly different from other writers. I was even planning to write one write on the same tittle when i left from the school after off the day but i couldn't able to find any sort of idea to write because i didn't want to write about an oak tree i wanted to write on an oak tree and i've seen by you by this write.

Second stanza and the last stanza're nicely penned, if i'd a suggestion, you should have to work on it more, there's a need to edit some more.
But overall view was nice and i enjoyed reading.

[Hannah]

So beautiful :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!!! :D

[Sakshi]

I had written once about a log of wood which became a swing later on :D

well written, I liked it..

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! Glad you liked it! :D

[Sakshi]

I loved the lines,

"We continued to walk
until we found the perfect tree
It wasn't the biggest or the prettiest
but we knew it was the right one"

and I absolutely agree... at times we just know, its our tree...
say for example, to sit in a public park, under some tree...we first glance around, and the tree which captures our attention - we go to it...

These lines reminded me of a lot of good memories... :)

[Ryan]

"we craved out a heart." carved, I believe?
this is a very sweet poem. i love the imagery and emotion. well done :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Whoops! lol Yeah it's suppose to be carved. Thanks for the review! :D

[Ryan]

you're welcome :)

[Edward]

It sounds like a fairy tale that has come true :) an amazing write! :D

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!!! :D

[KurKota]

A very pleasant writing. You express the joy and feelings you shared so beautifully !
I really enjoy this writing. Delightful !

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! :D

[RachelReaper]

this was so sweet :) this made me smile, actually, I really liked it. I couldn't see any mistakes within it, I thought you did a great job!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!!! ^-^

[Acer]

Another new flash. It's really very dominant as i saw. There's many lines i did love & touched my heart. You've a great talent indeed.

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks!!! ^-^

[Acer]

My pleasure ;-')
But your word's are really very dominant as i saw.

[Hannah]

Stunning :)

[The Invisible Girl]

:) Thanks!

[The Fallen]

>.< why must you be so good at writing poems!!!! I ish so jealous ! Another amazing write

[The Invisible Girl]

I'm not that good! lol :P You are amazing poet too!!! XD

[The Fallen]

You are to!!! And thanks