Hurry

They are coming.

Don't you hear them laughing at my suffering

It's their cruel game they cast on me

Watching me perish alone

Where no one can find me

Where no one can save me

All I see is black

crushing me from all sides.

I'm in a box 

and I can't get out

Oh, God save me from this cruel suffering.

I need you. 

I'm all alone

No one else to reline on..

but YOU.

Please ,God, hurry

I can feel my tears coming

Can't you see I'm shaking in fear

Take it away

The Loneliness, the Sadness, the Hate

They are coming for me.....................

Reviews

[David the writer]

This was great! I really liked this, and I feel there was a message, and it you take from it depends on the stand you take on god, but as a horror poem, I really enjoyed it, the message there you gave only added to the plesure. Great job!

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for the review!! ^-^

[David the writer]

Thanks for sharing!

[lbertygirl98]

Wow this was a haunting piece I really felt your pain and desperation and you had a lot of great description here I felt like I was in the box with you!! Very nice writing thank you for sharing:)

[The Invisible Girl]

^-^ Thanks for reading!!!! ^-^

[AlwaysCasey]

I thought the thing that was coming was people or a person when I saw it wasn't I was thrown aback. It's quite good.

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!

[Horizon K.]

Great job with this one. The fears and sufferings described are very vivid.

[CreativeCookie]

I really like how you personofied lonliness, sadness, and hate throughout the poem; revealing who/what "they" were in the end.
Love,
CreativeCookie

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!! ^-^

[Castonovia]

*They are coming* very intense with paranoia that speaks volumes of her fear... of the loneliness, sadness, and hate. A feeling we all get sometimes, loved it ;)

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!

[Castonovia]

No problem :p

[Larrycall]

dark . it shows your scared . i like it its different

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!! ^-^

[RachelReaper]

I wish I could say I couldn't,but actually I can relate to this. The feeling is simply horrible, but for what its worth... you described it perfectly.

[The Invisible Girl]

Thanks for reading!

[Art Lover/Love Writing]

I like it I just don't know how to explain why i like it I just do

[The Invisible Girl]

lol! well, thanks for reading!! ^-^

[Art Lover/Love Writing]

ur welcome and I owe u for all the times u've read my stuff

[Felicity's Eve]

I loved this! Sometimes, this is exactly how I feel...

I love to read things that are relatable to me.

Amazing work! :)

Ps how are you liking Casonia so far? o.O

[The Invisible Girl]

Its amazing!! lol I'll have to read more after Thanksgiving!! :D
Thanks for reading!! ^-^

[Felicity's Eve]

^^