Riddle My Sky

Creative Poetry group experiment. Given word list:ADVOCATE, CHARY, RIDDLE, MORSEL, ENRAPTURE, SAPPHIRE

Riddle my sky with sapphire stars
Enrapture this child once blinded by darkness
With a kosher little morsel from your  soul
So sanguinely I may observe and dine
In love's luxurious theater tonight

For your words are my absinthe
Your touch a sinless advocate for desire;
Alas, when dare the chary depths of hell
Screech my name, attempt to claim me again
I'll hold fast the tune to your garnet song

Author's Note

Not sure I'm happy with this, but I'm drifting back to sleep...

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Love the richly painted canvass of your words, bringing alive the colors and life opened up to this "child once blinded..." There is hope that you give us even when hell comes calling... Beautiful and profound!

[x]

'Kosher' was a bit awkward for me, it's just an odd word to find in poetry but over all, the first stanza works well. The second stanza shifts about in different directions and keeping track of the imagery required effort. I think it was the sinless desire thing followed directly by the chary depths of hell with the only link being alas.
It was a tough bunch of words you had to deal with though so on that note, well done.

[Narnie]

Maybe some more punctuation would help you gather your thoughts on it. The word and sentiment are beautiful and colourful... extremely well composed. Some breaths of a comma here and there might help the stream?

[Poetic Beauty]

I do like this poem. It is a little hard for me with some of the words you have chosen to use but that is an issue on my part not yours. Your work always has a depth that many others don't. Great write. Thanks for posting this poem in Creative Poetry.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

LOve is most certainly the most precious gem we can be given and absolutely priceless.... I thought this was an eloquent analogy comparing love to gem stones.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. You did wonders with the words. Poem is outstanding. You create powerful lines and a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote