Hope (A Batttle Cry)

This won me the best of 2007 in the category of Writing and Poetry in the Readers' Choice Awards on Mypace.com.

 

There will be no funeral for hope

 

As the Phoenix of myth it will ever rise undaunted

 

From the darkest embers

 

Glorious to behold, victorious and mighty

 

Though it carries its own particular brand of pain

 

It will never leave my heart, its house

 

Not sword, not word, not hate nor any action

 

Will vanquish this, my trusted companion

 

 

 

 

 

 

Together hope and I have slain fear

 

Mutilated injustice, played guardians to doubt

 

Kissed fools and frogs and reprimanded

 

Sternly the advances of many a prince

 

Unrecognized in the blindness

 

Created by our past and insurrections

 

 

 

 

 

 

Our battle cry this cold dark eve is

 

DEATH TO WORRY!

 

Our leader and hero,a soul

 

Unconquered, pristine and gleaming crystalline

 

The soul that is more than mine

 

For in each of us hope lies waiting

 

Perhaps covered in a blanket

 

Thick and unyielding for a time

 

Yet there

 

 

It lives

Copyright Constance Sxxxxx 2007 All Rights Reserved

Reviews

[The Musings of Mary H.]

There is a particular feeling I get as a reviewer when reading poems...and I have read many...that says, "Yes, this is a poem." This is what I feel now. Amazing from beginning to end.

Many great lines but this is my favorite...

"unconquered, pristine and gleaming crystalline"

Mary

[AK]

I love this piece!

[Pakino]

Deep and interesting good themes brought up.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Cool poem encouraging hope!!!

[mattavelli]

This is great!
"Death To Worry!"
Hope and worry are the same thing, hu?

[Jules]

Amazing!! My thoughts exactly: hope is the most important thing to have and to hold.

Really love this one :)

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I loved your refrence to the phoenix, the one and only that burns and is reborn from it's own ashes is definitly a symbol of hope. Very good. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.

[Emily Rose]

This is quite good - I really like the extended metaphor of hope as companion and a knight in shining armor. It's a very inspiring and moving piece. The language that you use fit is well, too, but I do think you should consider reducing the font size a little, as it's rather overwhelming to have to read those huge letters and that may detract from your message a little. Well done.

[Michael]

Very nicely done. I think you would give it a bit more of a punch by changing the "nots" of the next to the last line of the first stanza to "no"

I love the "DEATH TO WORRY" line, I might have to borrow it!

Think about reducing the font. Making the reader scroll down to see it all take away from a powerful read. You want this to feel like a punch to gut, don't let them catch a breath.

This one goes into the "favorites" Excellent job!

[Travis Lawrence]

This is a strong poem, I can see why it won you an award.

"Sternly the advances of many a prince
Unrecognized in the blindness
Created by our past and insurrections"
-- My favorite part, oh how true this is, the walls we build of fear and worry from our past.

The entire piece is inpsiring, I enjoyed it!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

"Kissed fools and frogs and reprimanded

Sternly the advances of many a prince"

liked the curt humor in that. wel ldone :)