The Depths

My imagination is an ocean and its pouring out of my ears!!!

An ocean of thought pools around my feet,
Dampening sand and dewing vegetation.
Salty vessels poisoning earth and 'eart
But fill air with anticipation.

A sea-bird shriek cracks open the still,
Mingling alongside veins of perception,
Exhilarating in both soft and shrill,
With a retention of vision's reflection.

The old man's wind and the young man's sun
Move in sync with no mans infraction.
A mother's moon and the innocent's stars
Observe with omnipotent intention.

Away sail'th I in the sea's dark mind,
Escaping all with no personal exception.
An ocean awaits my intangible soul,
Waiting for a new exploration.

Reviews

[The Elder Pine]

Great concept here. I think this piece may be talking about the soul and mind of a writer, or at least that is what it seemed like to me. Another possibility is that this piece speaks of a man attempting to explore his own soul and the depth of his infinite universe. I really think this is a good poem, there are many directions in which it can be taken and many thought to have about it. I think that it most likely holds something different with all who read it because there is such a large room for interpretations. Images are huge within your piece as well as good word usage and vocabulary as well as the right amount of form to keep everything running well and clicking on all cylinders, Great write.

"An ocean of thought pools around my feet,
Dampening sand and dewing vegetation.
Salty vessels poisoning earth and 'eart
But fill air with anticipation.

A sea-bird shriek cracks open the still,
Mingling alongside veins of perception,
Exhilarating in both soft and shrill,
With a retention of vision's reflection.

The old man's wind and the young man's sun
Move in sync with no mans infraction.
A mother's moon and the innocent's stars
Observe with omnipotent intention.

Away sail'th I in the sea's dark mind,
Escaping all with no personal exception.
An ocean awaits my intangible soul,
Waiting for a new exploration."