your poem is dead

it floats

face down

shame building 

in its bloated form

you can poke it

with a stick

turn it around

trying to find

a side

a bit more interesting

but its what you would expect

a gruesome picture of

something trying to breathe

but not succeeding 

it poisons the water

here

so please

keep your pollution

to yourself

no one wants to inhale

its putrid

wretched

nonsense

Reviews

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Pure fire with a really good flow overall to this work my friend very impressed so sorry I haven't commented sooner keep posting cheers.
gonzo

[thespaceinmybed]

Thanks a lot for the compliment!