Slipping away

Day turns to night 

and i put up a fight a fight for my life 

do i give up now or proceed to live a life of sadness and pain 

what ever i do it all feels the same 

live or die those words race threw my mind 

all the time  

life would be better for them if i was dead 

they say they love but i cant picture it in my head  

now i slowly slide this razor across  my wrist 

and make one last wish 

to take this pain of mine and leave it all behind 

as night turns to day 

I'm slowly slipping away 

Reviews

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Emotional. Simple. This is a good poem.

Some comments:
live or die those words race threw (perhaps you meant 'through') my mind
they say they love but but (you must have missed this repetition) cant picture it in my head

Some of my favorite lines:
now i slowly slide this razor across my wrist
and make one last wish

I love the rhyme in this.
Wonderful poem. A good start.

Keep writing,
Alex

[Katie L]

i love this poem honey, it is great and well written,i think that you are a great writer too. oh and love ya. keep writing! i know how you feel.