Thoughts

Spent time remembering ideas for stories and then forgetting them. Second best thing I could think of apart from smashing my head open from irritation towards my short memory was to write a song.

Spectre of abstract in a murky hole.
Created in my mind,
By a ripple of relief.
During time of my minds drought.
Invoked a zeitgeist for a moment.
From time to time it reappears ,
It just whizzes by so fast.
With which should I captivate it's searing ambiguity?
Never can I think of words,
Nor gestures that would do it justice.

I can't catch it for more than a moment.
Alas too late for it is no longer it,
It's different every time.
I rummage trough my thoughts trying to find the predecessor,
Losing the heir in the process.
The work is that of Sisyphus.
Another heir comes,
I'm rolling this stone upwards again.
Past one I'm never getting back.
Back to the bottom of the slope I go.

Author's Note

I'd be most thankful if you pointed out possible improvements and impact the song left.

Reviews

[maria ( rose)]

I find it captivating. As a song writer myself I feel where you are coming from.- your opening statement up top.
Everyone is their own writer. that's what makes us all unique. By me reading others stories and poems I tend to pick up tips along the way..to better myself as a writer..just takes practice. But I think you did an exceptional job!

mariarose- (from the best group to get reviews)

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Thanks and well it's mostly that I get no time to read during school and when I have free time I'm not that in the mood,thus it's easier if somebody else assists me here and there which has been most helpful in the past I must add. However the winter holidays are on the horizon so I'll have loads more free time.

[maria ( rose)]

you're welcome & I understand totally. Also if you could find someone who likes to Collaborate that is always fun to do, I know for me I've done a few with members & after thoroughly thinking about it ..I was glad I did.I know collaborating isn't for everyone, but sure is worth a try:)

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Eh haven't really tried it but will attempt it if i get a chance.