Painful Dream

Dreaming of past or possible love.

Painful Dream

She

 

So captivates

 

My deepest dreams

 

When she sings of me

 

In the tune of lasting lovely

 

She found my heartstrings

 

Pulled them forcefully

 

Clung to thee

 

She loves

 

Me.

 

Yet

 

I wake

 

I scream out

 

She has left me

 

Her silence burns

 

It shrieks out of tune

 

It doesn’t rhyme

 

Or make sense

 

Shes gone

 

Bye.

Author's Note

My intention was to make the second part of this piece choppy, hopefully representing the confusion that comes from heart break. Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

The comfort, warmth and excitement of a dream, shattered like a porcelain rose on waking and finding her gone. Beautifully penned my friend. I sometimes wonder if I actually prefer the dream state to reality some times.

[terry smith]

and the metronome skips a beat as your heart feels defeat....nice write my caffeine friend.

[Gee]

Choppy works Josh.Waking up with nowt but disappointment is disappointing.Well done

[Brian Csati]

Very well written! Emotionally charged.

[Insight "MH"]

Nicely written, and a beautiful lay out. The painful realty you made, is sad.

[Jane P.]

Beautiful poem! The shape is really intriguing and really adds to the pace and flow.
Awesome work!