Divorce.

Divorce.

A Poem by Coco

I settled for him
because I hated myself.
That lesson hits hard. 

© 2016 Coco


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You have said so much in few words - brevity is a skill many poets do not possess...:)

I read this a few times and then noticed that you nearly wrote a senryu, if even unintentionally. Three lines, 5 syllables first, 7 second, and 5 again at the end. It usually packs a punch when done well.

Please excuse my poetic intrusion, but this is just as an example - please try this at your own leisure:

i settled for him
because i hated myself
hard lessons hurt most

I love to break rules so I also took out all punctuation and capital letters, to stress the vulnerability of the writer.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


DITTO!Or should I say Deja Vu!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Yes. This resonates. Sometimes you just need to be succinct. I can infer so much from these three lines. This is fantastic and brevity is critical.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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A Poem by Coco


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A Poem by Coco