Angel in the Shadows

Part of my dark side

 

Angel in the Shadows

 

The dream again,

I woke with a fear

Sweat covering my body

Cold and dense,

Sticking me to my bedclothes

And chilling my soul to its core.

 

Would the Angel again guide me home?

It had so many times before.

I say it about my Angel for simpleness

It was either male or female

And followed the dream to its end.

 

Where do I land?

Upon which shore do I make this stand?

I know not what happens next

The Angel never told me

Yet in dark sweat I now lay

And yet near comes the light of day.

 

Shall it last one more night?

Can my soul stay fast this fight?

Or do I now look beyond

And enter into that ether world?

Am I ready for all to end?

Are you ready, the Angel’s last quest?

 

Lurking now in silence

They rest behind the cold, bright steel

Ready are they for me at last?

Was all life done in one great blast?

The shadows fall quickly away

Broken silence, alone and aghast.

 

Hello, says my Angel

Now is my time

The sweat does chill,

No warmth do I find

I float away beneath those wings

Looking down on my own pale flesh.

 

 

Reviews

[Suzanne Deakins]

Wow nice imagery and interesting phraseology... I think I might put it more in a present tense it would carry more punch ... rather than I woke try waking ... also floating away rather than I float away... will bring the reader closer to your ideas.. imo... but this is really really good work !!! Thanks for sharing

[Ruth]

Almost an OBE! George, love, this is breathtaking! Amazing imagery hon, makes the reader really feel the experience!
xx

[J Carly]

The death dream is always frightening. This piece was well put together, overall. You've done well in capturing the fear here, and the acceptance. Death dreams symbolize change more than death itself, and there's a beauty in the acceptance of that change in the end of this piece. You've made the cut thusfar in the Dreamscape contest. Well done.

[Reality]

Very intense, spooky almost as you picture yourself floating above your own body after you have died, interesting and thought provoking write

[BrightEyes]

wow - this piece is both dark and uplifting at one time. you've captured all the fear and uncertaintly - as well as an acceptance and calm at the ending. still - there is something about the last line that send a chill down the spine of the reader. excellent write.

[Dezaraye]

Your imagery in this piece is really beautiful. You have such a great talent for poetry, I'm always amazed at the stories you tell.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A wonderfully written poem. Loved it. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[DarkAngelWriter]

Mmm...I love it. Thanks for submitting :)

xxx

[Bear]

This is a wonderful write!!
I sure hope an angel does arrive to take me onward upon it's wings when my time here on Earth is complete.
Thanks for sharing!!
Sallie Bear