Understood Not

Forcing beliefs on other cultures? Not always the best idea.

 

 

Understood Not

 

 

Flee this place

Faster our pace

We came in peace

But in pieces we leave.

 

Were we to know

This love did not go

Fast from our books

Now in terror we look!

 

Crashing through rhyme

And leaving past time

Our Devil they worshipped!

Our God was not perfect?

 

Peacefully now we laid to rest

Our bodies sacrificed in one true test.

Heads now bowed low

As we await that blow

 

Twill cleave asunder

For our restless blunder

Never more to face

A truthful race.

 

 

Reviews

[intangible_soul]

Whoooo lord! Another spine tingling poem from you. I haven't been through all of your stuff yet but so far, I really like the style you write with, and the words you use.

"Twill cleave asunder
For our restless blunder
Never more to face
A truthful race."

Ahah! Indeed I agree with this last paragraph. Is there any hope for us at all?

[Ruth]

This is intense love! Questioning and thought provoking! A sublime piece of word crafting! xx

[poddar kushal]

nice rhythm and good job with the words...simply fabulous

[Carrie Montgomery]

"We came in peace But in pieces we leave."
this line stood out to me, I liked the play on words. This piece has a perfect rhythm and flows easily when read aloud.